Members Ferdinandstrat Posted December 17, 2009 Members Share Posted December 17, 2009 You folks said that I write decent lyrics when it really comes from a strong feeling or something...well here goes nothing again... Some people say a lot of thingsSome people say all kinds of bull{censored}And I am so tired of playing myselfI wish I could just lie downAnd some say we wont see tomorrow each dayAnd some say we all doomed from the startBut I am so tired of playing myselfI wish I could just lie down And if I told you The moon would hit the earthWould you still believe me if it didntIt's not a a thrill, it's a necessityI could sure lie down Some things are better left than saidSomething better remain locked in a closetOr a chest of some sortsI sure could lie down a bit right now And if I said"It's not me" And broke the mirrorInto million piecesWould You still stand by meAnd look at me the way you looked before Some people say change isnt goodAnd some people say divination is neededTo progress somewhere as advanced civilizationI could sure lie down by nowAnd all I can say is that I am so tiredFrom all the {censored} the world has in storeI am so tired of lying to myselfI could sure lie down by now Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Stackabones Posted December 17, 2009 Members Share Posted December 17, 2009 Yeah, those lyrics are solid. I love the tag line. It's something you hear folks say all the time outside of a song so it's about time it was said inside a song. Music, yet? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Ferdinandstrat Posted December 17, 2009 Author Members Share Posted December 17, 2009 Yeah, those lyrics are solid. I love the tag line. It's something you hear folks say all the time outside of a song so it's about time it was said inside a song. Music, yet? Thanks. Music...I got no way of recording... You can imagine it though, think old school TOOL. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members mpeddle Posted December 17, 2009 Members Share Posted December 17, 2009 Does your computer have a built-in mic even? I record my demos super crappy all of the time even though I actually have a really nice home studio because a) I'm a lazy git and b) it kills my flow to have to think further than pressing the red button and singing. If you have any chance of recording it, do send along. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted December 17, 2009 Members Share Posted December 17, 2009 These are strong and emotive lyrics...no doubt. After a few reads, though, I'm still not getting a good musical cadence. Probably one of those deals where you can tune up the flow when the music gets involved. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Ferdinandstrat Posted December 18, 2009 Author Members Share Posted December 18, 2009 These are strong and emotive lyrics...no doubt.After a few reads, though, I'm still not getting a good musical cadence. Probably one of those deals where you can tune up the flow when the music gets involved. I guess, that sounds pretty much like TOOL music. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted December 18, 2009 Members Share Posted December 18, 2009 I guess, that sounds pretty much like TOOL music. Yeah....I see what you mean. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members easilyspooked Posted December 18, 2009 Members Share Posted December 18, 2009 excellent turn of phrase:"And some say we wont see tomorrow each dayAnd some say we all doomed from the start" and i love the content of this peice:"Some people say change isnt goodAnd some people say divination is neededTo progress somewhere as advanced civilizationI could sure lie down by now" pretty dark, i like the flow of the content from personal to social anxieties. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted December 18, 2009 Moderators Share Posted December 18, 2009 You have no idea how these lyrics hit me personally. I could sure lie down right now... Well done. I'm serious, it hits me right between the eyes. Write somne great music for it. It deserves it. The cadance could be cleaned up but it's there. Finish it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Ferdinandstrat Posted December 18, 2009 Author Members Share Posted December 18, 2009 excellent turn of phrase:"And some say we wont see tomorrow each dayAnd some say we all doomed from the start"and i love the content of this peice:"Some people say change isnt goodAnd some people say divination is neededTo progress somewhere as advanced civilizationI could sure lie down by now"pretty dark, i like the flow of the content from personal to social anxieties. Thank you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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