Moderators Lee Knight Posted June 6, 2012 Moderators Share Posted June 6, 2012 Canceled due to lack of interest on the author's part. Stripped for parts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rsadasiv Posted June 6, 2012 Members Share Posted June 6, 2012 And my key doesn't fit the lock any more Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members saturn1 Posted June 6, 2012 Members Share Posted June 6, 2012 OK, I expect to hear some III/VI subdominants and the like in the changes. I like 'company loved her misery', 'bare feet and an evening gown' they seem like strong verse endings. The fourth verse doesn't resonate as well for me. Overall, though, this is overdriven, man, I mean, its saturated. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted June 6, 2012 Author Moderators Share Posted June 6, 2012 It's just stream of babble nonsense that most likely won't be developed but thought I'd see where it took me. Saturated and overdriven! Yeah, the 4th verse of drugs and booze was just a means of showing where she's come from. It probably hogs the spolight with its attention grabbing subject matter, carrying too much weight. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted June 6, 2012 Members Share Posted June 6, 2012 Full fathom five thy father lies; Of his bones are coral made; Those are pearls that were his eyes: Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Chicken Monkey Posted June 7, 2012 Members Share Posted June 7, 2012 You should run this by some non-musicians to see how "key change" resonates--I really have no frame of reference for how that plays with civilians. I was also under the impression that Chivas Regal was a high-end drink, but I'm not much of a drinker. There's a lot of amazing lines throughout, tho--company loved her misery, bare feet and an evening gown, etc. If you're going to throw this out, be sure to strip it for parts beforehand. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members saturn1 Posted June 7, 2012 Members Share Posted June 7, 2012 If you're going to throw this out, be sure to strip it for parts beforehand. That's a song concept itself. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted June 7, 2012 Author Moderators Share Posted June 7, 2012 You should run this by some non-musicians to see how "key change" resonates--I really have no frame of reference for how that plays with civilians. I was also under the impression that Chivas Regal was a high-end drink, but I'm not much of a drinker. There's a lot of amazing lines throughout, tho--company loved her misery, bare feet and an evening gown, etc. If you're going to throw this out, be sure to strip it for parts beforehand. Stripped for parts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rsadasiv Posted June 7, 2012 Members Share Posted June 7, 2012 Stripped for parts. Another good lyric idea.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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