Members smallbutmighty Posted June 8, 2009 Members Share Posted June 8, 2009 Hey Everyone,Just finished a rough mix for "Each Breath I Breathe Her". Any thoughts on the mix/ song/ arrangement? Song is here. It should start playing automatically. I know it's a weird looking link - it's piggy-backed on my wife's salon site. Thanks!Aaron Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members micmike Posted June 10, 2009 Members Share Posted June 10, 2009 Man everything but the vox sound decent to be honest. Ever thought about collaborating with a vocalist?Not sure what you're most passionate about and if I'm being disrespectful, but the songwriting in terms of guitar and structure seems really solid.The vox just sit out as a bit weak... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members speierg Posted June 10, 2009 Members Share Posted June 10, 2009 Nice work man! Judging by your website, you and I grew up listening to the same bands. Good stuff. Back to the song...I didn't have a problem with the voice at all. You sang on pitch and the performance was solid. Perhaps some additional vocal parts could be added to spice things up even more. The song has a Maroon 5 vibe except that the vocals are not arranged like a Maroon 5 song...they tend to sprinkle in lots of little vocal parts all over the place to really build up the song. Tasteful guitar playing and really nice tone throughout. Excellent work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Beakybird Posted June 10, 2009 Members Share Posted June 10, 2009 You are good! Really good! Turn up the bass. Sometimes it sounds like there is no bass. You rock man. Do get a lead vocalist. You sing good, but your material deserves better. It sounds like there are some empty pockets where there should be some harmony lines. This isn't my kind of music, but I'm turned on by your chops. Get out of the garage and get it into the arena - or at least the bar! Beakybird Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members smallbutmighty Posted June 10, 2009 Author Members Share Posted June 10, 2009 Thanks guys. Yes...I know my voice is adequate, but not stellar. That's why I hire out the vocals for all my country songs. Most of my other songs aren't commercially pitchable, so I just sing them myself. This one might be different.... Hmmm..... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members AceCAdams Posted June 11, 2009 Members Share Posted June 11, 2009 00:00/00:17 - Excellent guitar intro, then those drums come in!!!! Damm.00:18 - Good lyrics. "Kisses hot and humid like a summer rain." From then good funk guitar, nice flange(I believe thats the word forthe said effect. 01:26/> - obsession adjective with the guitar creates a 70's feel.I almost thought I was playin GTA 1 with the Funk FM sound track on.02:00/> - Nice guitar sequence of chords and harmonies. Very powerfulto back up the already strong lyrics. 02:37 - Back to the lyrics, nice distorted break down.Lyrical masterytowards the end of the song, very well done. In all a good song, almost movie quality music with EXPERT GUITAR USAGE.Like BeakyBird said you can hire a vocalist or just (My option) get a singing book and improve on your own talent.I've added you as a friend. Keep up the good work!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Boydog Posted June 12, 2009 Members Share Posted June 12, 2009 good song,, bring the bass up ,, other than that works it for me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Mikeo Posted June 12, 2009 Members Share Posted June 12, 2009 loved it. I even took a quick look at your wife's sallon site:D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members smallbutmighty Posted June 12, 2009 Author Members Share Posted June 12, 2009 loved it. I even took a quick look at your wife's sallon site:D LOL. She's got a hair salon in one end of the house, I have a studio in the other. What more could a rocker from the '80's ask for? :love: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members blue2blue Posted June 13, 2009 Members Share Posted June 13, 2009 I don't normally comment on lyrics unless they're posted but the music here sounds solid, it's got a nice wah-driven funkyness, your love of retro rock shines through, here, and it's all solidly done. I got a nice chuckle out of the little filtered white noise 'break,' too. It's not the production forum, but I have to say you got a nice clean, sharply defined sound there, really noticed it as the vocal closed out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members electricfish Posted June 15, 2009 Members Share Posted June 15, 2009 From the title I thought it might be cliche shmaltz ..... but you got the funk man. Good song. I noticed a few comments about the vocals. Could they be better? Well, that's almost always the case isn't it? But I think they're plenty good enough.Good writing - both music and lyrics. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members smallbutmighty Posted June 16, 2009 Author Members Share Posted June 16, 2009 From the title I thought it might be cliche shmaltz ..... Yep...I feared people might get that vibe from the title. Oh well, it's nice to shake 'em up! Thanks for the props on my vocals, BTW. I take having my vocals characterized as "plenty good enough" as a compliment! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members SrMeowMeow Posted June 18, 2009 Members Share Posted June 18, 2009 I actually really liked the vocals, and the whole song in general. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted June 18, 2009 Members Share Posted June 18, 2009 Good song. Good production. Cool guits. Hey, I even like your voice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members smallbutmighty Posted June 18, 2009 Author Members Share Posted June 18, 2009 I don't normally comment on lyrics unless they're posted .... Good policy. So: Each Breath I Breathe Her by aaron cheney Kisses, hot and humid like a summer rain Whispers, a sugar tongue that only spoke my name She made me believer her, deceiver But when I tried to leave her She closed the door - made me want more (Chorus) Some kind of crazy lover I've never felt another I'm thinking only of her I sleep and dream her But now I see her clearly Should never let her near me My body's paying dearly Each breath I breathe her Visions, I wake up sweating from a fever dream She's my obsession, confession And I'm in her possession I cannot go - when her skin says "no" (Chorus) Some kind of crazy lover I've never felt another I'm thinking only of her I sleep and dream her But now I see her clearly Should never let her near me My body's paying dearly Each breath I breathe her She made me believer her, deceiver (Chorus) Some kind of crazy lover I've never felt another I'm thinking only of her I sleep and dream her But now I see her clearly Should never let her near me My body's paying dearly Each breath I breathe her -------------------- Now...comments? :poke: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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