Members maddrummerdude Posted August 17, 2009 Members Share Posted August 17, 2009 This is probably not my most accessible or commercial song, but I think it might be a good album closer or something. I really like listening to old Renaissance choral composers (such as Allegri or Palestrina) so I wanted to try to get that old, gothic cathedral, monks-in-habits feel.....hence the 'verb. The song is posted here: http://www.myspace.com/colinkohtzistight and is called "Annus Mirabilis" As I said in an earlier thread, my educational circumstances have left me without much in the instrument department so I only used my voice for this one. I tried to get a choral effect by singing over myself a dozen times. Although a melody eventually comes through and presents some lyrics, I wanted to go for a more wall of sound type thing and thus the lyrics might be muddled, My Bloody Valentine style. So I shall post them here: Farewell my child I love you dearly Your path is long You will not hear me Maybe someday when I magically become a sound engineer, I can figure out how to make the lead vocals more clear without overwhelming the mix. Myspace's compression gave the lead vocals a little bit of whisperish feedback which sucks. I know this won't appeal to everyone; it's pretty much the opposite of a pop song. Still, any comments/criticism is appreciated Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rockinrobby Posted August 17, 2009 Members Share Posted August 17, 2009 Beautiful... I was in madrigals so I can can really appreciate this and relate. But the title? Annus Mirabilis? Sounds like Latin for "I have marbles in my butt?" I particularly enjoyed this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members maddrummerdude Posted August 17, 2009 Author Members Share Posted August 17, 2009 Beautiful... I was in madrigals so I can can really appreciate this and relate. But the title? Annus Mirabilis? Sounds like Latin for "I have marbles in my butt?" I particularly enjoyed this. Hahaha...I was worried people would think "Anus." Annus means year. It actually means "Year of Miracles" in Latin. I was originally going to write a song about the Great Fire of London (which happened in a year designated as Annus Mirabilis) but the melody didn't work with my original lyrics. I scrapped them, sang these improvised lyrics, and liked it. The Latin is chanted in the background, and the background is what took the longest to do, so I kept it. I didn't really care what Latin phrase I used, I just wanted something that sounded ancient-sounding. If I get more people telling me that they like or dislike my anus song, I guess I'll have to change the title Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Z-Mann Posted August 18, 2009 Members Share Posted August 18, 2009 This is REALLY great stuff man. I'm adding you to my friends page. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Blue Jimmy Posted August 18, 2009 Members Share Posted August 18, 2009 Very nice, man. Enjoyed other stuff on your playlist as well, especially Oceanic. You're expressive. I'd like to hear it dry as well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rockinrobby Posted August 18, 2009 Members Share Posted August 18, 2009 Hahaha...I was worried people would think "Anus." Annus means year. It actually means "Year of Miracles" in Latin. I was originally going to write a song about the Great Fire of London (which happened in a year designated as Annus Mirabilis) but the melody didn't work with my original lyrics. I scrapped them, sang these improvised lyrics, and liked it. The Latin is chanted in the background, and the background is what took the longest to do, so I kept it. I didn't really care what Latin phrase I used, I just wanted something that sounded ancient-sounding. If I get more people telling me that they like or dislike my anus song, I guess I'll have to change the title Mad drummer, I thought I was the only baratone who could also sing mezzo sopranno? But you are hitting those high notes in falseto, very nice, I can do this too, but there are very few men who can pull this out of their annus... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Sam McDonald Posted August 18, 2009 Members Share Posted August 18, 2009 Beautiful Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Surrealistic Posted August 18, 2009 Members Share Posted August 18, 2009 You make a wonderful sound with your multi-layered vocals - beautiful stuff. For me, what would make this even better would be another section - I don't know whether you'd call it a chorus, bridge or middle eight in something like this - where you invert the melody, move up or down a fifth or something similar. I think that would turn this into something spectacularly good. Really nice stuff already though - it's different and I like different Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members easilyspooked Posted August 18, 2009 Members Share Posted August 18, 2009 this not being a pop song depends on how you define pop song, i'd say this is extremely accessable to the average listener, the lyrics are relatable and the melody is beautiful. consider taking it to your local amateur film scene, as it would make beautiful music in a short piece. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Nearthemusic Posted August 18, 2009 Members Share Posted August 18, 2009 I think you underestimate the accessibility of this song. It's simple and beautiful--great for easy listening. I agree with the poster who suggested an alternate section. Something like an aaba type format seems like it would work well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members maddrummerdude Posted August 18, 2009 Author Members Share Posted August 18, 2009 Thanks for all the great input guys I love this forum. consider taking it to your local amateur film scene, as it would make beautiful music in a short piece. I am seriously considering doing this, thanks for the advice Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Blakemore Effects Posted August 19, 2009 Members Share Posted August 19, 2009 God, I love your voice. Move to Nashville immediately. I need you to front a band for me haha. This is beautiful though. I've loved everything you've posted so far. Keep it up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Nearthemusic Posted August 20, 2009 Members Share Posted August 20, 2009 I are not that gud with music theory: is inverting the melody changing the entire key, or just changing the notes of the melody?I was wondering how to change up the structure of the piece, but I haven't come up with anything that works. I'm working through serious writers block here, but I'll keep at it. An inverted melody is simply the melody turned upside-down. Chord inversions refer to the bass note of the chord. It sounds like your song is in G major so you could easily slide into em for a bit since that's its relative minor. Maybe something like--em, A, C, G would work for a few bars. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rlm297 Posted August 20, 2009 Members Share Posted August 20, 2009 If the pop star Dido broke a string while doing a bar room sing-along of "Annus Mirabilis," the planets would most certainly allign. "Dude, did you see Dildo looking for a G string after she popped one playing Anus Marbles with the drunks?" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Chicken Monkey Posted August 20, 2009 Members Share Posted August 20, 2009 Some good advice here--a contrasting section would break this up well. Alternately, if you're thinking album lineup, cutting this down to maybe twice through the main section might work for a cool opening. It definitely sets a mood and gets the attention, but before long that mood shifts to "bored". I've heard it, and the lyrics/arrangement aren't doing to maintain interest for very long. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rockinrobby Posted August 20, 2009 Members Share Posted August 20, 2009 My girlfriend (new) was asking me how I thought things were going with us so far? I've been seeing her since early January? And I told her, so far, I'm very happy with your annus, very happy indeed... Butt I need to see it for a few more months to make a final comment? I'm sorry, no more cracks like that... I'm trying to put them all behind me? I don't want to be cheaky. I do like this choral arrangement though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Dean Roddey Posted August 21, 2009 Members Share Posted August 21, 2009 I like it. Ignore the comments about it being boring. That's why everything sounds like it does today, because of everyone trying to be as poppy and ADD friendly as possible. Just being another of the million (boring) same old same olds is a sure fire way to oblivion. Do what movies you. And, as Robbie Robertson and others have pointed out, sometimes the limitations of the instrument provides the originality. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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