Members J.Paul Posted July 28, 2011 Members Share Posted July 28, 2011 Can't decide how this title should look "on paper"IOWOWIowowIoWOWi-o-wowIo_wowiowowany suggestions? here's a little worktapehttp://www.jpaulmusic.com/Audio/Iowow-worktape.mp3 Iowow You're brewing coffee in a Hawkeye jerzeeshowing those legs giving me no mercy.You have'nt had time for the makeup yet,the dog ain't walked and your hair's wetbut any Iowa girl in front of meis better than a model in a magazine. CHORUSWhat's in the middle of America?Pretty girls from Iowa!Who's in the center of the USA?Venuses from Boone to Ames!Babe if you're from Iowathat state don't make sense becauseeyes are telling me right nowthey should have named it IowowIowow Near fields of crops and collegesis where I know the action is.When I'm with my Herkey honeypie,I know why corn stands up all night,they're jealous and want you to seethem growing while you're kissin' me. CHORUS From Cedar Falls to the Mississipsmy hand's in yours and on your hipslets scoot across and twirl aroundlike I'm the mayor and you're the town CHORUS Music & Lyric Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Ontological Posted July 28, 2011 Members Share Posted July 28, 2011 You're brewing coffee in a Hawkeye jerzeeshowing those legs giving me no mercy.You have'nt had time for the makeup yet,the dog ain't walked and your hair's still wetbut any Iowa girl in front of meis better than a model in a magazine. I made my amendment in italics. The line as is doesn't flow right when you sing it. If you add the word "still" I think you'll find it easier to sing. Anyhow, even though I'm married to a beautiful South African girl I need to visit Iowa apparently just to people watch! Cool song. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members J.Paul Posted July 28, 2011 Author Members Share Posted July 28, 2011 I made my amendment in italics. The line as is doesn't flow right when you sing it. If you add the word "still" I think you'll find it easier to sing. Anyhow, even though I'm married to a beautiful South African girl I need to visit Iowa apparently just to people watch! Cool song. ThanksYeah, I did it w/ "still" yesterday and the day before and like it as well BUT :there's barely room for a breath in the next word on the next line "any"....Most producers would probably cut this 7-10 BPM faster than the worktapeat that point there's no room for a breath on the next line (if I left "still" in) so that's why I took it out unless it went "the dog ain't walked and your hair's still wetIowa girls in front of meare better than models in a magazine" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted July 28, 2011 Members Share Posted July 28, 2011 Can't decide how this title should look "on paper"IOWOWIowowIoWOWi-o-wowIo_wowiowow Io-wow? LCK Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members J.Paul Posted July 28, 2011 Author Members Share Posted July 28, 2011 Io-wow?LCK yeah I knowI'm screwedthat's what I get for inventing words.....words that look like digital code Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted July 28, 2011 Members Share Posted July 28, 2011 Yeah? Well I love it! Especially the way you belt it out. I'm not much on analyzing lyrics on paper anyway when I've got a good song like this one to listen to instead. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted July 28, 2011 Members Share Posted July 28, 2011 yeah I knowI'm screwedthat's what I get for inventing words.....words that look like digital code How about just using "Iowa Girl?" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted July 29, 2011 Moderators Share Posted July 29, 2011 IoWOW! Love the lyric. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members J.Paul Posted July 29, 2011 Author Members Share Posted July 29, 2011 Iowa Girlperhaps LCK ....I like the exclamation point Leewe should all have signatures with that lets see : Iowow!yeah, that looks a little better to me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rhino55 Posted July 29, 2011 Members Share Posted July 29, 2011 iOwow Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ido1957 Posted July 30, 2011 Members Share Posted July 30, 2011 EYe oh Wah Wah - new pedal....talk to Dimarzio about an endorsement deal. Great vocals man - love the range and the melody... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members J.Paul Posted July 30, 2011 Author Members Share Posted July 30, 2011 Great vocals man - love the range and the melody... yeah man thanks I ugh...don't really sing country I usually get someone else do sing the demos after I flesh the worktape out....I actually have stopped singing most of the pop/rock songs I write unless I write them for my voice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members notlimah Posted July 30, 2011 Members Share Posted July 30, 2011 Great job on the vocals. Cool country tune. I like "Iowa Girls" as well. jeff Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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