Moderators Lee Knight Posted November 3, 2011 Moderators Share Posted November 3, 2011 So, first draft of Stick's Children's Song Challenge. One of my heroes is Shel Silverstein. And he's... so... well, deeper than this below. Is this enough for a kid's tune? Any more layered and it gets too much for kids. Maybe it already is. Maybe not deep enough. I'm thinking 5 year olds here. Shel... he had skills. Lots of layers and yet it hit kids right between the eyes. Their parents too. Is the language too wordy or adult? So, comments? I'd like to start working the music soon... I DON Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rsadasiv Posted November 3, 2011 Members Share Posted November 3, 2011 And grandpa saysI eat my peas with honeyI've done it all my lifeIt makes the peas taste funnyBut it keeps them on my knife Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted November 3, 2011 Author Moderators Share Posted November 3, 2011 And grandpa saysI eat my peas with honeyI've done it all my lifeIt makes the peas taste funnyBut it keeps them on my knife Nice! I'm actually going for a little kid empowerment. A little covert kid action. I wish I was big and could do whatever I wanted. I don't like 'em. I don't. Honey's not going to fix it. I draw the line at peas. Don't tell about the dog. Shhh... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members stickboymusic Posted November 3, 2011 Members Share Posted November 3, 2011 Like it a lot Just this line A big ol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted November 3, 2011 Author Moderators Share Posted November 3, 2011 Like it a lot Just this line A big ol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted November 3, 2011 Author Moderators Share Posted November 3, 2011 Like it a lot Just this line A big ol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rsadasiv Posted November 3, 2011 Members Share Posted November 3, 2011 I think I like:4. Did you know potatoes are vegetables? And I love french fries!* That line sounds the most in character - but you need ketchup in there somewhere. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted November 3, 2011 Author Moderators Share Posted November 3, 2011 That line sounds the most in character - but you need ketchup in there somewhere. I know. Still trying to figure that one out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted November 3, 2011 Author Moderators Share Posted November 3, 2011 ...but you need ketchup in there somewhere. OK. Kid freestylee at the end: But... my dog does... shhhh.... tomatoes are supposed to be realllly good for you too, and guess what I put on my french fries??? Ketchup. And guess what ketchup is made out of... go ahead guess... like spaghetti sauce...I'll tell you if you don't know but try and guess... ...eeww. No.... not PEAS! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rsadasiv Posted November 3, 2011 Members Share Posted November 3, 2011 Ketchup, as Mr. Reagan kindly informed me, is also a vegetable. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members oldgitplayer Posted November 3, 2011 Members Share Posted November 3, 2011 Ketchup, as Mr. Reagan kindly informed me, is also a vegetable. I had to look this one up. Wiki says : In 1981, the United States Congress under the Reagan administration ordered the United States Department of Agriculture to issue new standards for federally financed school lunch programs, which would enable schools to economize; one of the USDA's proposals was to classify ketchup as a vegetable. The suggestion was widely ridiculed and the proposal was dropped. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Monkey Uncle Posted November 4, 2011 Members Share Posted November 4, 2011 Fantastic. I don't think I'm getting the layers you mentioned, but it doesn't matter. And did I say corn already? Especially the flakes Now that is a great line. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted November 4, 2011 Author Moderators Share Posted November 4, 2011 Fantastic. I don't think I'm getting the layers you mentioned, but it doesn't matter.Now that is a great line. I was trying to say, there aren't any. With Shel Silverstein, there are. Thanks man. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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