Moderators Lee Knight Posted July 18, 2012 Moderators Share Posted July 18, 2012 What a cool song this is. The lyric is so... wise. I love the turn you took with it lyrically. We could this We could that Just cause we've fallen in love What a great idea. I particularly like the lines: We could settle right down Build up our home We'd have each other's backs When they're up to the wall Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members bee3 Posted July 18, 2012 Author Members Share Posted July 18, 2012 No, a rip roaring guitar solo with notes that tear through your soul. Ahhh... I've got the perfect guitarist for that sort of thing too... but he's in Kansas City... I should see if he has access to a studio. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members bee3 Posted July 19, 2012 Author Members Share Posted July 19, 2012 Latest version... no rip roaring guitar solo yet, but I created space for it... Also did a vocal comp... Let me know what you think. http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=11775794 Edit: Still a few vocal clunkers in there. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members bee3 Posted July 19, 2012 Author Members Share Posted July 19, 2012 Oh... and thanks Justin, LCK, and Lee. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rhino55 Posted July 19, 2012 Members Share Posted July 19, 2012 We'd have each other's backsWhen they're up to the wall Was the only area that I thought felt awkward. I think the line is great and don't think it needs to change. I think singing it some more, you'll make it fit. From what I remember, most of your stuff has a doubled vocals. I'm not sure if you're planning on doing that with this one too, but FWIW, I really like this with one take. As far as a ripping guitar solo goes I think this one is a prime candidate. If it were me I would have the solo come in on the last section of Ooos. I'd more or less have it follow the Ooos the first time through that pattern building in intensity the whole time. Then take a big bite during while during the last section of Ooos. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Oswlek Posted July 19, 2012 Members Share Posted July 19, 2012 Finally hit me which Floyd tune the "ooh" bits remind me of - The Thin Ice. Listening with headphones - this is a killer tune, Justin. With phones those perc tocks don't bug me nearly as much. I hear the solo coming in around the 3:21 mark. Seriously, if the solo ends up being as strong as it is in my head, I'd listen for another full 2 minutes. Maybe more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members bee3 Posted July 19, 2012 Author Members Share Posted July 19, 2012 We'd have each other's backsWhen they're up to the wallWas the only area that I thought felt awkward. I think the line is great and don't think it needs to change. I think singing it some more, you'll make it fit.From what I remember, most of your stuff has a doubled vocals. I'm not sure if you're planning on doing that with this one too, but FWIW, I really like this with one take. As far as a ripping guitar solo goes I think this one is a prime candidate. If it were me I would have the solo come in on the last section of Ooos. I'd more or less have it follow the Ooos the first time through that pattern building in intensity the whole time. Then take a big bite during while during the last section of Ooos. Bingo! I'm leaving this a single vocal and only doubling the oohs. Really makes them pop in my opinion... The single vocal for me is a personal victory. Doubling is my crutch. And I was messing around with guitar solos yesterday... exactly as you describe here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members bee3 Posted July 19, 2012 Author Members Share Posted July 19, 2012 Finally hit me which Floyd tune the "ooh" bits remind me of - The Thin Ice.Listening with headphones - this is a killer tune, Justin. With phones those perc tocks don't bug me nearly as much.I hear the solo coming in around the 3:21 mark. Seriously, if the solo ends up being as strong as it is in my head, I'd listen for another full 2 minutes. Maybe more. I changed the snare sound... its tamer now which is probably why it doesn't bother you as much. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rsadasiv Posted July 24, 2012 Members Share Posted July 24, 2012 I changed the snare sound... its tamer now which is probably why it doesn't bother you as much. Grip it and rip it man. Let the chips fall where they may. Re: ripping guitar solo. F--yeah. I would certainly listen that the guy from your blues band for two more minutes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members bee3 Posted August 1, 2012 Author Members Share Posted August 1, 2012 So I've got a call in to the guitar player... he may be able to lay something down. Fingers crossed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members oldgitplayer Posted August 1, 2012 Members Share Posted August 1, 2012 Great music and lyric. Just one suggestion :There are a lot of we's. They are still implied if you leave them out.Consider: We could battle it outWith such good intentCould each build a wallAnd hide behind itWe could follow the scriptAnd act out the partsPlay them all... We could break for the shoreWhen weather is roughCould float through our livesnever to know what its like to have lovedOr to have fallen apart We could settle right downBuild up our homeHave each other's backsWhen they're up to the wallWe could hold our heads upAt the end of it allWe're all right We could break for the shoreWhen weather is roughAnd control our livesChange our direction and do what we likeJust cause we've fallen in love Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members bee3 Posted June 21, 2013 Author Members Share Posted June 21, 2013 Well... it's been about a year... this one has been Averyfied. http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=12375702 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted June 22, 2013 Moderators Share Posted June 22, 2013 I agree with Phil here. The tune is fantastic. But you have sung a lot of your other stuff so much better that I want you to give this particular song a better chance. i suggest retracking the whole vocal with a new perspective. This particular vocal sounds much more na Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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