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Original song! "In this better life"


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Hey everyone,

 

Here's my latest original song. Let me know what you think!

My friend did guitar and co-wrote and I did lyrics and singing!

Feed back would be good!

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"IN THIS BETTER LIFE LYRICS"

 

In your dreams are where the stars will shine

You can not leave yourself behind

You gotta stand tall and play kind

In this better life

 

Never expected it to be so tough

But tough just means you can’t give up

You gotta stand brave, and survive

In this better life

 

Fly away, fly away, fly away

You can’t wait another day

Fly away, fly away, fly away

You got through, is what they'll say

 

Chorus

Follow your heart, follow your soul

Follow your mind

That’s where your destiny lies

Stand tall, stay strong, put up a fight

You’re gonna be just fine

In this better life

In this better life

 

They dunno how you got this far

A fighter is what you are

You gotta stay you, and push through

In this better life

 

Fly away, fly away, fly away

You can’t wait another day

Fly away, fly away, fly away

You got through, is what they'll say

 

Chorus

Follow your heart, follow your soul

Follow your mind

That’s where your destiny lies

Stand tall, stay strong, put up a fight

You’re gonna be just fine

In this better life

In this better life

 

Gotta get there, gotta get there

Somehow

Coz baby you’re right here

Gotta get there, gotta get there

Somehow

Coz baby you’re right here

But you belong

Where you belong

 

Chorus

Follow your heart, follow your soul

Follow your mind

That’s where your destiny lies

Stand tall, stay strong, put up a fight

You’re gonna be just fine

In this better life

In this better life

 

Oh oh oh oh

Oh oh oh oh

 

Follow your heart, follow your soul

Follow your mind

That’s where your destiny lies

Yeah

Stand tall, stay strong, put up a fight

You’re gonna be just fine

 

© Tamara Farmer 2018

 

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Hey, TJPG -

 

Good work!

 

Strengths: Words, melody, pace. And you have a real nice voice.

 

Suggestion: Get some vocal coaching. A good teacher will give you voice exercises to help you hit the notes without thinking about them. If you plan to make a go of singing and songwriting, it will be a great investment.

 

Keep it up. You're on the right track!

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Not bad.

 

One thing I would have done is, get to the chorus sooner. Your first verse is like 2 verses. You have about 30 seconds to capture your audience, with a hook. I might have not even given the chorus space right here

 

 

That’s where your destiny lies ( you have 2-3 bars depending on how you count it.)

Stand tall, stay.

 

I'd try to do in 1 bar so it moves quicker.

 

 

I think you got something here with this demo, and hopefully, you do.

 

 

Like I say when I write a song, there's nothing etched in stone till it sell 20,000 copies. :D

 

 

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