Moderators Lee Knight Posted August 13, 2014 Moderators Share Posted August 13, 2014 Flowing in the bar room Cooling in the jail Bleeding on the stone floored church... 'fore the graveyard and a final coffin nail 'fore the graveyard and the old wife's tale 'fore the graveyard and your final exhale 'fore the graveyard, as you finally exhale Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rhino55 Posted August 13, 2014 Members Share Posted August 13, 2014 This is crazy good. It reminds me of Cormic McCarthy. It's got a cool southern gothic timeless quality to it. I couldn't help but work up a version Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rhino55 Posted August 13, 2014 Members Share Posted August 13, 2014 I ended not doing the second to last chorus and back to "flowing in the barroom" and went through that back into a chorus after the bridge. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members oldgitplayer Posted August 13, 2014 Author Members Share Posted August 13, 2014 This is crazy good. It reminds me of Cormic McCarthy. It's got a cool southern gothic timeless quality to it. I couldn't help but work up a version Please post a rough demo - I'd love to hear your take on it. I'm really pleased when someone likes a lyric enough to do a version of it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members oldgitplayer Posted August 13, 2014 Author Members Share Posted August 13, 2014 If you're are interested in another cowrite... I am. This is freaking great. I don't want to impose but I really love this. If interested, I'd love you to maybe send your musical take on this over. A pm is fine if you'd like to stay private. Or out in the open. Or send nothing as I've got ideas. Or keep it for yourself. All your call. I love it. Lee - I'm really happy to do a co-write with you on this. My composing skills are limited, my playing is basic, and as far as recording goes, I can hit the record button. It gives me great pleasure that firstly someone likes my writing enough to work on it, and secondly someone who can sing, play and record at a pro level. And I get to sit back and make producer like comments and hear a totally finished result. Take all the creative liberties you want and I'll help with the direction you take. I haven't picked up an instrument on this yet, but I will. If nothing emerges, then OK, and if something does I'll let you have it. And if you nail the verse and chorus, then I might be able to bounce off those with a Bridge like the way 'Turn Another Corner' fell into place. Choose your own process - either a vox + guitar starting point, or work it up a bit more like 'Ravenhurst Road'. Obviously the opportunity for any input from me works better with the former. Take it away Mr K. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rhino55 Posted August 13, 2014 Members Share Posted August 13, 2014 Please post a rough demo - I'd love to hear your take on it. I'm really pleased when someone likes a lyric enough to do a version of it. Will post tomorrow AM Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members oldgitplayer Posted August 13, 2014 Author Members Share Posted August 13, 2014 And a big thanks to Ram for his contribution to the early draft - it has become the chorus……....png.197c47f720636f02390cc2b0a33804da.png' alt='smiley-veryhappy'> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rhino55 Posted August 13, 2014 Members Share Posted August 13, 2014 http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=12885341&q=hi Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted August 13, 2014 Moderators Share Posted August 13, 2014 http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=12885341&q=hi I respectfully bow out. That is really cool, Ryan. Fantastic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rhino55 Posted August 13, 2014 Members Share Posted August 13, 2014 Thanks Lee. No need for all that. I can go to that studio where I recorded that last record, lay this down with some proper mics, and send you a copy if you wanted to work it up further. I can't promise I'll be able to hit it with a click, but I can try. It's really up to git though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Foose31 Posted August 13, 2014 Members Share Posted August 13, 2014 http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=12885341&q=hi Like what you did with GIT's lyric. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members oldgitplayer Posted August 13, 2014 Author Members Share Posted August 13, 2014 That's really nice Ryan - it's a very Ryanesque southern ballad rendition. But I'm sorry Lee feels the need to bow out. His version would sound quite different, as will mine if I attempt one.A bit like the lead solos at the end of the Abbey Road medley - you can hear George, John and Paul's personalities distinctly in their playing. Lee - I listened to the first-try chorus demo I sent you yesterday - it's all wrong. It doesn't capture the mood of the song.I'm hearing something more up-tempo this morning. If I tackle it, I expect it might be a bit off a JJ Cale and John Wesley Harding album hybrid. Are you sure you won't get involved? - I hope you might reconsider. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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