Members EvilSoup Posted September 3, 2007 Members Share Posted September 3, 2007 I've written lyrics for a number of my songs. I don't think they are that bad, but it takes me a really long time to make them and it doesn't feel too natural for me. I don't have that emotional connection to the lyrics I write, it is kind of like acting in a way. Here are four of my favorite lyrics I've written with soundclick links to the songs: Through the Forest Riff/Intro Verse 1 I'm running through the forests, Show me what I want to see, I want to see your power, Spirit energy, I want to believe, everythings not what it seems, Take me on ride, ride to the other side. Chorus Running through the forests (Searching for what might exist) Wondering what we could of missed (Running through the forests) Riff Verse 2 I'm running along the path, Searching for what might exist, Then out of the air, A burst of cold in my chest, A shining ball of light, came out from the forest, Maybe this is what I'll find, a new kind of life Chorus Running through the forests (Searching for what might exist) Wondering what we could of missed (Running through the forests) Riff Verse 3 Wondering what I see, might be something I'll forget, As the light fades to shadow, The spirit I just met, Shows me the right path, but I'll be back again, Wondering if I exist, running out of the forest. Chorus Running through the forests (Searching for what might exist) Wondering what we could of missed (Running through the forests) Running through the forests (Searching for what might exist) Wondering what we could of missed (Running through the forests) Riff/Outro Falling Awake Verse 1 Can't sleep, falling awake, minutes pass, A dream, of you and me, beneath eternity, Asleep, free from gravity, reality, Wake up, fallen back to earth, time stops, Prechorus For you, I dream, Chorus I've fallen away, I'm falling awake, falling for you, I've fallen through time, drifted away, now I lie falling awake, Verse 2 Can't wait, to see your face, hours pass, A stream, of falling blue moonbeams, it's getting late, Asleep, another dream, eternally, Awake, without you, time stops, until once again, Prechorus For you, I dream, Chorus I've fallen away, I'm falling awake, falling for you, I've fallen through time, drifted away, now I lie falling awake, Bridge (Solo) Prechorus For you, I dream, Chorus I've fallen away, I'm falling awake, falling for you, I've fallen through time, drifted away, now I lie falling awake, Verse 3 Asleep, free from gravity, reality, Wake up, fallen back to earth, time stops, Trip Intro Verse 1 You, Me, Everything has gone under, Right now, Then, Time is an illusion, Give it a break, Chorus Just take a trip, A little trip, Take everything that you need, Verse 2 Need, Want, Don't take this all on me, please, tell me whats Real, Lies, Just realize the truth in yourself, Chorus Just take a trip, A little trip, Take everything that you need, Chorus (No Vocals) Verse 3 (with Riff) Space, Time, aligns as one continuum, as Us, Them, Fall away in the future Chorus Just take a trip, A little trip, Take everything that you need, Chorus Just take a trip, A little trip, Take everything, Lights Out Intro Verse Numb, from the eyes, Can't recognize, It's dark outside, Stay in sight, Prechorus Where'd you go, I'm running out of control, Out of control, Chorus All alone Verse Lights out, Asking why, I can't see you, One more time Don't worry, It's alright, Prechorus I don't know where you went, I'm running out of command, Out of command, Chorus All alone Bridge Outro Don't leave me here all alone, I'm just a boy, in a hole, All alone. Excuse me for the bad recordings and the bad singing. I'm singing better now than those recordings. I'm still young, and I'm improving fast. Please try to keep the responses on the lyrics, the music is there for context. I'm just looking for someone to maybe encourage me a bit or tell me the truth. Also, if you want to hear some of my more current music which I feel is much stronger than this check out my myspace in my sig. BTW - I did also post this on the songwriting forum, I just want some opinions from HCFX! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members olejason Posted September 3, 2007 Members Share Posted September 3, 2007 Lyrics are overrated. It's all about the effects and guitar solos Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members placebo62 Posted September 3, 2007 Members Share Posted September 3, 2007 I like it dude, dont stop writing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members melx Posted September 3, 2007 Members Share Posted September 3, 2007 when I write lyrics I write them as I write the chords and I think about how the words sound with that particular chord or how they feel in the chord structure rather than what they mean. To me that's more important. After I've written them I read through them and attatch personal meaning to them, so I can sing them with some emotion. example: Time with you againLook at me with venomLike you summerisethe light between your eyes I had no idea what those words meant when I wrote them, I just liked they way they sounded..but now I know what they mean and who they are about....to me anyway, which is the only important thing because everyone will project thier own feelings and thoughts onto your lyrics and they will mean something else to them anyway. yeah, most important to me is how the words sound. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Ambient Exposure Posted September 3, 2007 Members Share Posted September 3, 2007 Lyrics are overrated. It's all about the effects and guitar solos What a great comment. :thu: I may not fully agree, but the comment is as funny as hell. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members melx Posted September 3, 2007 Members Share Posted September 3, 2007 Try writing songs without 'I' or 'you' in them also, it tends to make you write differently. Also try writing in the third person, lots of 'she' or whatever. you might find it gives you some new ideas. ...and try some stream of concoiusness (can't spell) stuff. just put your pen on the paper and write what comes into your head, then as you are reading that sentance, it will make you think of the next line, do that for a page or two, then go back and sift through it all and pick out the stuff you like, then arrange it into a song after, I've written some great choruses using that method. just some ideas to try and inspire you to keep going Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ninjaaron Posted September 3, 2007 Members Share Posted September 3, 2007 I'll trade you. I wish I could write lyrics. It's like I have a mental block, or I'm afraid to try or something. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members EvilSoup Posted September 3, 2007 Author Members Share Posted September 3, 2007 Just put your pen on the paper and write what comes into your head, then as you are reading that sentance, it will make you think of the next line, do that for a page or two, then go back and sift through it all and pick out the stuff you like, then arrange it into a song after, I've written some great choruses using that method. I sort of do that, it takes me a lot longer though to make something good. It's not like writing the music, I usually get really into writing everything else and even my most complex pieces I usually finish in a day or so. Lyrics don't feel like my thing at all, I'm wondering if my lyrics are good enough to keep with it though. I just don't feel like I have the connection between the words and the music. I'm wondering if there are any other songwriters like me? In my exband, my bassist would write lyrics too, he seemed a lot more into it and more attached to his lyrics. He was good with titles. Here's one of his lyrics: 3 Feet from the Ocean runaway, close my eyes, shut the doorsay goodbye, to all your lies, never wondering whymake believe, in a dream, things are not, what they seem24, hours more, until i have and i thought this was the last timebefore i'd save your soulthis dream could never last a lifetimenever die young, never grow oldas i walk through the hills in silenceas i speak i fade awayas i stand 3 feet from the oceani know to stand far away one more way, for my lies, to come undonesave your fight, for the life, we have wonmake believe, all your dreams, live inside things you see24, ways i lack the fire inside to win you back and i thought this was the last timebefore i'd save your soulthis dream could never last a lifetimenever die young, never grow oldas i walk through the hills in silenceas i speak i fade awayas i stand 3 feet from the oceani know to stand far away runaway, close my eyes, shut the doorsay goodbye, to all your lies, never wondering whymake believe, in a dream, things are not, what they seem24, hours more, until i have to make it on my own Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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