Members DaSpider Posted August 8, 2007 Members Share Posted August 8, 2007 This is a Beatle / music hall style song about everyday life in a city park throughout the year (Rittenhouse Square is in Philadelphia). Think Penny Lane / Martha My Dear... It's something different for me (I never tried to write in this style), so I'm curious if it works. I know it might not be your cup of tea, but any comments or suggestions would be appreciated! Thanks!Neall Rittenhouse Square Winter just seems to last a lifetimeThe Square turns cold and dark, but there's lifeYou and I bundled up warm and tightCause we knowWhere to meet tonight So come on babyI'll meet you therein Rittenhourse Square Spring seems to burst its way through the groundThe birds start to come on back aroundOld men find their place on the park benchCause they knowSoon their eyes will dance with delights Chorus Summer here gets all hot and humidThe fountains get all filled up with kidsThe parents sit and gossip with their friendsAnd why not?Cause everything'll be alright Chorus All the buildings just stand in lineThe wind makes the trees sway back and forth in timeAnd we know our love will last foreverCause Rittenhouse Square's what brought us together Fall signals it's time to stop the partyCause the trees change their leaves once againFor you and I another year's gone byAnd we knowWhere to meet tonight Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rsadasiv Posted August 8, 2007 Members Share Posted August 8, 2007 Like it a lot. My favorite of your songs so far. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members attic Posted August 8, 2007 Members Share Posted August 8, 2007 Well done!It's catchy, I like the lyrics, and I really dig the smokey voice.The only thing that bothers me a bit is that cello part at the first chorus. It sounds strange, but that's just a small detail. Good job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Chicken Monkey Posted August 8, 2007 Members Share Posted August 8, 2007 It's maybe a little too Beatlesque--I think I even hear a hint of a fake British accent in there. It seems like you've got a V-C-V-C-Br.-C-Br.-V pattern, which is weird. The two bridges, one of which disrupts the lyric pattern (winter-spring-summer-fall), disorient me a little. If there was a regular verse between them, it might work a little better for me. I do love the little instrumental lines you've got running throughout--cello, french horn, etc. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members DaSpider Posted August 8, 2007 Author Members Share Posted August 8, 2007 Well done!It's catchy, I like the lyrics, and I really dig the smokey voice.The only thing that bothers me a bit is that cello part at the first chorus. It sounds strange, but that's just a small detail. Good job. Thanks attic! The cello part is something I've messed around with and finally gave up on. Neall Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ido1957 Posted August 8, 2007 Members Share Posted August 8, 2007 You got a lot of that Lennon sound in this one - cool...... The cello and french horns work well - definitely reminiscent of the old Beatles tunes. Also reminds me of that old song - "I can't see me lovin' nobody but you for all my life"- whatever that was..... Nice catchy, interesting tune..... Mix, if you need to know, is fabulous! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members eeglug Posted August 8, 2007 Members Share Posted August 8, 2007 There's a whole bunch of people who have a sound derived from this Beatles-y vein - XTC, Robyn Hitchcock, Martin Newell. Oh and let's not forget the Kinks who were probably influenced by the Beatles but were doing this kind of material almost concurrently. (Thematically your song has some similarity to "Waterloo Sunset".) The song is great - I love it. I felt the bridge wasn't distinctive enough and maybe a bit too long - and that's probably cuz I was eager to hear the catchy stuff in your verse and chorus! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members DaSpider Posted August 9, 2007 Author Members Share Posted August 9, 2007 You got a lot of that Lennon sound in this one - cool......The cello and french horns work well - definitely reminiscent of the old Beatles tunes. Also reminds me of that old song - "I can't see me lovin' nobody but you for all my life"- whatever that was.....Nice catchy, interesting tune..... Mix, if you need to know, is fabulous! Thanks ido1957! I appreciate the comments! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members eeglug Posted August 9, 2007 Members Share Posted August 9, 2007 Daspider, you need to be Kink-ified. If you like doing songs like this, you must do yourself a favor and get Face To Face, Something Else, Village Green Preservation Society, Arthur and Lola vs Powerman and The Moneygoround. Your song fits directly into their aesthetic both musically and lyrically. For now, check these out: Sunny Afternoon and Waterloo Sunset Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members DaSpider Posted August 9, 2007 Author Members Share Posted August 9, 2007 Daspider, you need to be Kink-ified. If you like doing songs like this, you must do yourself a favor and get Face To Face, Something Else, Village Green Preservation Society, Arthur and Lola vs Powerman and The Moneygoround. Your song fits directly into their aesthetic both musically and lyrically.For now, check these out: Sunny Afternoon and Waterloo Sunset Thanks man, I'll check it out. I know their more popular stuff, including Sunny Afternoon. Neall Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rsadasiv Posted August 9, 2007 Members Share Posted August 9, 2007 Waterloo Sunset is my favorite Kinks song, but all of those albums are great. I prowled the K bins in used record stores for several years searching for Village Green Preservation Society - I finally did find that great lost Kinks disc, but not before acquiring an absolute loathing for the cover art on every single Kid Creole and the Coconuts album. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members DaSpider Posted August 9, 2007 Author Members Share Posted August 9, 2007 There's a whole bunch of people who have a sound derived from this Beatles-y vein - XTC, Robyn Hitchcock, Martin Newell. Oh and let's not forget the Kinks who were probably influenced by the Beatles but were doing this kind of material almost concurrently. (Thematically your song has some similarity to "Waterloo Sunset".)The song is great - I love it. I felt the bridge wasn't distinctive enough and maybe a bit too long - and that's probably cuz I was eager to hear the catchy stuff in your verse and chorus! BTW, nice mention of Martin Newell too. I love the The Greatest Living Englishman! Not sure what he's been up to these days though... I haven't listened to that in years. I'll have to throw it on the iPod. Neall Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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