Members LeonardScaper Posted December 7, 2008 Members Share Posted December 7, 2008 Pretty much done with love songs for a while. Thought I'd try something a little different. I don't play much blues guitar so I'm out of my league big time on this one. Wondering about general structure. Also wondering about where to place the lyrics....particularly in the two bridge sections. This tune is a WIP for sure. Lots of tools to still apply...blues harp, electric guit, drums......maybe even the Calhoun Street Horns. Advise would be appreciated. BTW...I haven't posted lyrics because I'm not quite sure what they are yet. Oh...I set this one up for a fade out, so it's a little long as is. http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7127504 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ido1957 Posted December 7, 2008 Members Share Posted December 7, 2008 Pretty much done with love songs for a while. Thought I'd try something a little different. I don't play much blues guitar so I'm out of my league big time on this one. Wondering about general structure. Also wondering about where to place the lyrics....particularly in the two bridge sections. This tune is a WIP for sure. Lots of tools to still apply...blues harp, electric guit, drums......maybe even the Calhoun Street Horns. Advise would be appreciated. BTW...I haven't posted lyrics because I'm not quite sure what they are yet. http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7127504 I think the arrangement chord and melody wise is fine. (For me) the exit from the lead break could use some more full chords to emphasize the sweet transition. I would end it at 3:45...as the story's been told...maybe a fast fade out....Lyrics are great perfectly bluesy - post em... Pretty much done with love songs for a while. Thought I'd try something a little different. This would make a great line/title for a song.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted December 7, 2008 Author Members Share Posted December 7, 2008 Lyrics are great perfectly bluesy - post em...: Thanks.......... She cried When she broke my heartI should have known we were doomed right from the start But it was a bolt from above.I've got flawless intuitionBut I'm hooked on love. She lied But how was I to knowShe took me in her arms and then she let me go That's when push came to shove.It's like a choreographed collision 'Cause I'm hooked on love. My My The way she movesWhen she sits me down and gets me in a groove And I can't get up.I'm in a bad position 'Cause I'm hooked on love. I tried I did my level bestBut she looked damn good in that little blue dress Yes it fit like a glove.I've made some bad decisions Cause I'm hooked on love. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ido1957 Posted December 7, 2008 Members Share Posted December 7, 2008 It's like a choreographed collision Favorite line among many good ones..... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rsadasiv Posted December 8, 2008 Members Share Posted December 8, 2008 Pretty much done with love songs for a while. Thought I'd try something a little different. I thought "Full Body Smile" was a great love song as was the twenty year old wedding song. I don't play much blues guitar so I'm out of my league big time on this one. I think the chops are there, but they sound very rusty. Wondering about general structure. Also wondering about where to place the lyrics....particularly in the two bridge sections. A lot of that really depends on the guitar part - structure as is should be fine if the guitar interludes and fills were better played. If the guitar isn't going to get any better you probably need to do significant cutting and reshaping. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Boydog Posted December 8, 2008 Members Share Posted December 8, 2008 song def, has potiental like Ram says , sounds sorta rusty but with a little work can be good stuff Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted December 8, 2008 Author Members Share Posted December 8, 2008 Thanks guys........... I'm hoping I can clean things up a bit when I track the SG.....maybe get Stella off the stage a bit, although my blues licks will still leave a great deal to be desired. Gotta step out of my comfort zone once in a while, though. Planning on having some fun with this one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members murrayd77 Posted December 9, 2008 Members Share Posted December 9, 2008 Hey..man replying to your post listening your song.. The lyrics are good and the song is very melodious. Good dude !! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members eeglug Posted December 9, 2008 Members Share Posted December 9, 2008 It's a nice little tune, but way too long. If there was a good solo in there I might go for it. Your voice works great in this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted December 11, 2008 Author Members Share Posted December 11, 2008 It is too long.......fade out early for sure. Tracked some percussion. Definitely needs some sort of solo. Getting ready to track the SG.......let's see what happens. Played a lot of blues harp in a previous life. Might be time to dig out the old lickin' stick...... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Sentry68 Posted December 12, 2008 Members Share Posted December 12, 2008 Pretty much done with love songs for a while. Thought I'd try something a little different. I assume you mean after this one.... Some very cool percussive action in this from all the instruments- I can't even identify it all, I'm not sure about a couple things. It kind of gets distracted in the middle and then sorta snaps back to the lyrics here and there. Definitely has your trademark loose structure- it always feels one step away from a train-wreck, but just manages to stay on the track with two wheels. You're blessed with a solid homogeneous style that I could pretty well pick out any time- although I'm sure you've worked it out over time. I've always bounced across styles myself, which really kind of denies any identity. Ah well, it fits my ADD well.... Another great song mr. leonard. I'd love to have a whole cd for listening on a lazy sunday afternoon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted December 13, 2008 Author Members Share Posted December 13, 2008 Actually I was hoping that this tune would get me off in a slightly different direction.......btw, thanks, Sentry, for your kind words. Anyway, in the true WIP spirit I'm posting a version with some percussion and electric guitar in the hopes of possible suggestions as to further instrumentation and/or arrangement ideas. Somebody needs to slap me hard enough to get me to fade this song out. http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7144767 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Eclepto Funk Posted December 14, 2008 Members Share Posted December 14, 2008 i think the vocals are great on this the song seemed a bit, too long? not varied enough? i think you could compress this and come out with an awesome tune Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted December 18, 2008 Author Members Share Posted December 18, 2008 Thought I'd close this thread out with the latest version......... Hooked On Love Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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