Members jasonb Posted December 27, 2008 Members Share Posted December 27, 2008 Hey guys, could I get some comments on my new music? Just trying to pick up some tips. I think I've come a long way since I've started doing my own recording. What do you think? The song is "For what comes between us" http://www.myspace.com/splitboard Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members aliensexist112 Posted December 27, 2008 Members Share Posted December 27, 2008 hey I can't find it where it is? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members jasonb Posted December 27, 2008 Author Members Share Posted December 27, 2008 Just click the link, the song should auto play from there, if not just click on the song title in the myspace player. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members blue2blue Posted December 27, 2008 Members Share Posted December 27, 2008 I like the intro pretty well. I'm a fool for spacey slow blues type stuff. Which is a good thing, looks, like. There's a nice, really restrained quality, here, reminiscent of the disciplined emotionalism of someone like David Gilmour. Now, nothing says a piece like this has to end up back with the beginning motif, but I wondered if it might help solidify the identity of the tune in folks' minds if you didn't maybe come back around to the motif you spent some time establishing in the beginning? It could be the difference between someone passing an agreeably dreamy few minutes, walking away with a vague positive impression -- or the same person getting to the end of the song and walking away with a real sense of the song, maybe kind of humming it or reliving the haunting intro themes. Well... you get the drift. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Sentry68 Posted December 28, 2008 Members Share Posted December 28, 2008 Very good little groove here, I like it. It feels a little spartan here and there, like maybe the bass could get a little more active and in the mix. As a guitarist myself, I appreciate instrumentals- but I think this one is begging for some good lyrics. Just a thought. Good song! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members jasonb Posted December 28, 2008 Author Members Share Posted December 28, 2008 Thanks for the responses guys! I agree that some parts are a bit sparse and I actually have been thinking of redoing the bass line we'll see. Now I really apreciate the David Gilmour reference! Hes one of my favs, if I could be 1/100 of the guitar player he is I would be happy! As far as lyrics..... I'm not much of a lyricist or singer for that matter, but I have been planning on adding lyrics and actually doing some singing myself on my next project. We'll see how that goes! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted December 28, 2008 Members Share Posted December 28, 2008 Yeah......I really enjoyed this listen. Your playing elecits a deep emotion....it held me right to the end. I'd think carefully about other instruments as you have established an intimacy with the guitar. A well played bass line or even a haunting organ. Lyrics would need to be just right regarding performance and writing.....wouldn't force the issue. With this tune I would think like a physician......first do no harm. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ido1957 Posted December 28, 2008 Members Share Posted December 28, 2008 Nice instrumental - reminds me of Jeff Beck! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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