Members BenDuncan Posted November 17, 2009 Members Share Posted November 17, 2009 What do you think of these lyrics? I finished the music several months ago and now I'm trying to get the lyrics up to par. Lyrics are definetly my weekness but I've been reading a lot about them and I think I'm getting better. Thanks! Bygones Be Gone Verse: I was born in autumn to a GeminiDidn Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted November 17, 2009 Moderators Share Posted November 17, 2009 I like it... except for the bridge. Sorry. I really do like the way you're saying what you're saying. Everything has a familiar yet fresh slant. Except the bridge. The bridge loses that freshness and sounds cliched. And I should know, I am the king of cliches. If it were me, I'd completely rewrite the bridge. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members BenDuncan Posted November 17, 2009 Author Members Share Posted November 17, 2009 And I should know, I am the king of cliches. Hah! Thanks for the feedback, the bridge in this song is where I'm having the most troble, It will come eventually though! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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