Moderators Lee Knight Posted August 17, 2011 Moderators Share Posted August 17, 2011 So, yes... we know the title has been used before but... well, I kinda want to do a modern take on Motown. Sort of Stevie's Uptight, Everything's Alright. So I ditched my earlier stab at it and got this at lunch, here's what I got so far... Emotion Sickness Are you sick-sick or just love-sickIs it the flu or just a broken heartAdd it up, do the arithmeticOne into two then two apart Emotion sicknessRiding the crest of a waveEmotion sicknessNo way to behaveEmotion sicknessGonna dig you up a young man's grave Pull the covers up to your chinBut you can't hide from the light of dayDude, even Ray Charles can see the shape you're inTrying to make the hurt go'way Emotion sicknessRiding the crest of a waveEmotion sicknessNo way to behaveEmotion sicknessGonna dig you up a young man's grave Are you sick-sick or just love-sickSome kinda virus or is it all in your headShake it off man, now there's the trickGo get a little angry (lovin'?) instead Emotion sicknessRiding the crest of a waveEmotion sicknessNo way to behaveEmotion sicknessGonna dig you up a young man's grave No? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted August 17, 2011 Members Share Posted August 17, 2011 So, yes... we know the title has been used before but... well, I kinda want to do a modern take on Motown. Sort of Stevie's Uptight, Everything's Alright. So I ditched my earlier stab at it and got this at lunch, here's what I got so far... .......No? Not no, yes. With maybe a few changes... Are you sick-sick or just love-sickIs it the flu or just a broken heartAdd it up, do the arithmeticOne into two then two apart Emotion sicknessYou got tossed off a waveEmotion sicknessNo way to behaveEmotion sicknessGonna put you in a young man's grave Pull the covers up to your chinBut you can't hide from the light of dayDude, even Stevie Wonder sees the shape you're inTrying to make the hurt go'way Emotion sicknessYou got tossed off a waveEmotion sicknessNo way to behaveEmotion sicknessGonna put you in a young man's grave Are you sick-sick or just love-sickSome kinda virus or is it all in your headShake it off man, now there's the trickGet yourself some angry lovin' instead Emotion sicknessYou got tossed off a waveEmotion sicknessNo way to behaveEmotion sicknessGonna put you in a young man's grave. LCK Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members stickboymusic Posted August 17, 2011 Members Share Posted August 17, 2011 or maybe "thrown from" tossed off (at least in this country) can have a very different meaning Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rhino55 Posted August 17, 2011 Members Share Posted August 17, 2011 To be completely honest, I'm not a huge fan of the phrase "emotion sickness." I get it is a play on motion sickness and do think it's clever, but to me it sounds like it should involve the internet somehow. On to the lyric. The verses are fantastic especially given the motown feel your going for.... I could see Sam Cooke singing that "Are you sick-sick (with an accent and horn stab on the second sick)... *slight pause* Or just love sick" The chorus could still use some work. "Riding the crest of a wave" sounds like fun. I know it could be a wave of sickness, but to me it doesn't go with what your saying. If you're in the sea Emotion sicknessPounded by the cresting wavesEmotion sicknessNo way to behaveEmotion sicknessUnless you want to call the sea your grave (not sold on this line either) or if you're on the sea Emotion sicknessbouncing with the cresting wavesEmotion sicknessOnly remembering what you gaveEmotion sicknessNo way to behave Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted August 17, 2011 Author Moderators Share Posted August 17, 2011 or maybe "thrown from" tossed off (at least in this country) can have a very different meaning Bwah-hah-hah! Yeah, tossed off = not good. (thanks stick) But Lee, that's great what you've done there. That really kicks it into the direction I was going with it. So yeah, this light, Motowny thing about love sickness and a bro trying to help out a bro. Get outta bed, dick! With out the "tossing" off course. Stevie instead of Ray? Cause... of the Uptight mention I made or for some other reason? Angry lovin'? Sounds like something I'd say. I love that! I'm bad. So are you. And then Rhino, your point about what he's doing on that wave. Knocked off the wave. Tossed off was good except for the masturbatory allusions. I can work on that (no, not that). Something to say he was riding a rough wave and he was knocked off. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted August 17, 2011 Author Moderators Share Posted August 17, 2011 I could see Sam Cooke singing that "Are you sick-sick (with an accent and horn stab on the second sick)... *slight pause* Or just love sick" Hah! I love that. I heard it from your page and it's good. It'll be done. Love it. (Kinda James B. too) So a big sting^, drop the beat wihtout losiong any bars then back in. The cool thing is I get to do it again in the third verse. YEAH! Hwuh! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted August 17, 2011 Author Moderators Share Posted August 17, 2011 Emotion sicknessKnocked off from the top of a wave Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted August 17, 2011 Author Moderators Share Posted August 17, 2011 OK... next revision: Are you sick-sick... or just love-sickIs it the flu or just a broken heartAdd it up, do the arithmeticOne into two then two apart Emotion sicknessKnocked you off the top of a waveEmotion sicknessThis ain Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted August 17, 2011 Author Moderators Share Posted August 17, 2011 Oh-oh... I'm hearing Outcast. Are you sick-sick... or just love-sickSome kinda virus; is it all in your headShake it off man, now there's the trickGet yourself a little bit'a nasty instead Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members stickboymusic Posted August 17, 2011 Members Share Posted August 17, 2011 im still wondering with the "wave" line , it being the chorus and all how about emotion sicknessgot you shakin like a sound wave i dunno just something kinda cool and fun - this is motown! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted August 17, 2011 Members Share Posted August 17, 2011 Oh-oh... I'm hearing Outcast.Are you sick-sick... or just love-sickSome kinda virus; is it all in your headShake it off man, now there's the trickGet yourself a little bit'a nasty instead Yeah, but I'm not even sure I like "angry lovin'." So "bit'a nasty" seems over the top. But, hey, that's me. I'm only cynical about love because I'm a hopeless romantic. LCK Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members stickboymusic Posted August 17, 2011 Members Share Posted August 17, 2011 outcast! Emotion sicknessgot you a shakin like a sound waveEmotion sicknessThis ain Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted August 17, 2011 Author Moderators Share Posted August 17, 2011 To be completely honest, I'm not a huge fan of the phrase "emotion sickness." I get it is a play on motion sickness and do think it's clever, but to me it sounds like it should involve the internet somehow. I didn't address that but I will now... I hear ya. I really want to write something that will be noticed. I would love Usher to say, Man, this will be my hip Outcast thang. That's what I'm going for here. Like country has it's slick turns of phrase. So does R & B. And I'm much more into the Outcast sense of humor and kinda see a way I could wedge myself in here. Or not. But that's the aim. HEY! NOTICE ME!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members stickboymusic Posted August 17, 2011 Members Share Posted August 17, 2011 im now hearing a group of girls singing the "emotion sickness" line Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted August 17, 2011 Author Moderators Share Posted August 17, 2011 outcast! Emotion sicknessgot you a shakin like a sound waveEmotion sicknessThis ain Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted August 17, 2011 Author Moderators Share Posted August 17, 2011 im now hearing a group of girls singing the "emotion sickness" line Absolutely. And trem funky guitar and vox organ and sub bass and crazy {censored}. And a groove. I'm gettin' it in my head as we speak. Cheezy funk in dee trunk. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted August 17, 2011 Author Moderators Share Posted August 17, 2011 Are you sick-sick... or just love-sickIs it the flu or just a broken heartAdd it up, do the arithmeticOne into two then two apart Sickness, emotion sicknessgot you a shakin' like a sound waveSickness, emotion sicknessThis ain Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Oswlek Posted August 17, 2011 Members Share Posted August 17, 2011 Why is it that I keeping singing the phrase "emotion sickness" with the same melody as "detachable penis"? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted August 17, 2011 Author Moderators Share Posted August 17, 2011 Why is it that I keeping singing the phrase "emotion sickness" with the same melody as "detachable penis"? Yeah... why is that? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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