Members ZachariahAS Posted October 15, 2013 Members Share Posted October 15, 2013 Dear YouI remember on that dayCoffee stains and yellow hayLipstick red, red and bright as dayCheckered blouse and tattered jeansThen you made me, made me want to sayWon't you won't you won't youStay here, stay here with meAll year, all year darlingPromise you'll stayPromise you'll stayRight here, right here with meDon't speak, don't say a wordIn my arms you'll layIn my arms you'll layBeyond the last goodbyeOh the pipe dreams of the youngYeah we're here working here night and dayBut there's no need to hang your headThere's no need to be so sadThink back to that very dayRemember why youStayed there, stayed there with meAll year, all year darlingAnd promised you'd stayAnd promised you'd stayRight there right there with meDon't speak just rememberIn my arms you'll layIn my arms you'll layBeyond the last goodbyeWrinkles and white hair andshrunken toes, thin skin and tired smilesBut those smiles will be thereIn my arms you'll layRight there, right there with meWithout speaking just rememberingThe memories we madeThe memories we made Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted October 15, 2013 Members Share Posted October 15, 2013 The audio is very low on the YouTube clip. Plus, I'd much rather have an embedded link to the audio file that opens a new pane.I'll hold my comments until I can actually hear the tune. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted October 15, 2013 Moderators Share Posted October 15, 2013 video embedded. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted October 15, 2013 Moderators Share Posted October 15, 2013 Did you want me to rerecord too, Lee? ???????? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members mbfrancis Posted October 15, 2013 Members Share Posted October 15, 2013 The audio is there, it is quiet, but it's there. Or are you trying to make a point about recording quality? I'm wondering if the OP *wants* feedback - last time a couple of us chimed in and he never came back to the thread, ha. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted October 15, 2013 Moderators Share Posted October 15, 2013 Audio is there. It's actually quite nice. I want to return when I can to comment. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted October 16, 2013 Members Share Posted October 16, 2013 Lee Knight wrote: Did you want me to rerecord too, Lee? ???????? Hah! No, sorry. For some reason the volume bar in the embedded video was halfway down.I just caught it... and I was finally able to listen.It's nice, but as mbf has pointed out, Zacharias has posted before and doesn't seem to be looking for workshopping ideas, just an audience. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ZachariahAS Posted October 16, 2013 Author Members Share Posted October 16, 2013 Hi, I'm not sure why there are no replies, I have replied in both the fallen (in love) thread and this one but nothing seems to show. I'm using my friend's phone to type this but I will resolve the issue soon. Thanks so much for all your critique, appreciate it very much and I take everything that is said into writing my new songs! Will resend my responses once I've sorted it out. Thanks again guys. LoveZachariah Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ZachariahAS Posted October 16, 2013 Author Members Share Posted October 16, 2013 Hi,I'm typing this on my computer and have just reposted on the "Fallen (In Love)" thread, again it looks like both this and that got posted but I don't know if they really were. Could I have a reply to this just to know my message posting is working? Thanks everyone, apologies. Zachariah Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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