Members fastplant Posted August 9, 2005 Members Share Posted August 9, 2005 I can't seem to not write in ABAB style lately. Like: I like piewhy don't yougive it a tryyou'll like it too ...type stuff Every song of mine follows the same pattern, and not intentionally, it just keeps ending up like that. What are some other cool rhyme schemes? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Deef Posted August 11, 2005 Members Share Posted August 11, 2005 There's a hundred of 'em. Just scope the lyrics of the songs you like. If you want to break your pattern, try NOT rhyming at all. I've come to feel rhyming is overrated. Concentrate on succinct, evocative imagery in your lyrics. Deef Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ratthedd Posted August 11, 2005 Members Share Posted August 11, 2005 Try limmericks or AABCCB rhymes. For instance: Twenty Three Dollars - © Erik Oosterwal I've got twenty three dollars to my nameand I finally figured out who is to blamemy daddy was a loserand my mama was a boozerThey told me that I'd end up just the same. I never really care too much for schoolI hated every teacher every ruleThe homework was too toughand the bullies were too roughso I did the things I thought would make me cool. I got myself a brand new alibimy friends all got me drunk and got me highmy boss just set me freeand my girl walked out on meso I sit here in the dark alone and cry yeah, I've got twenty three dollars to my nameand I think I know who really is to blameI'm just a lazy jerkwho doesn't like to workso take a tip and don't you be the same. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted August 11, 2005 Moderators Share Posted August 11, 2005 Buy the book "The Lyrics of Cole Porter". Try writing your own lyrics to his rhyme schemes... if you can. But if nothing else, you'll start adding new rhyme schemes to you quiver. Cut the complexity of one of his schemes in half and you'll be doing great. Same goes for Ira Gershwin (probably more so) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members fulcrum Posted August 21, 2005 Members Share Posted August 21, 2005 How about a nice sonnet? You don't have to keep it in iambic pentameter if you don't want to, though the traditional sonnet is written in that meter. abab cdcd efef gg (that's Shakespearean sonnet) Or if you're feeling ambitious, there's abab bcbc cdcd ee (that's Spenserian sonnet) Or maybe Petrarchan sonnet? abba abba (cdecde OR cdcdcd OR cdcdee-- he used all three) Rodney Dangerfield quoted a famous villanelle in one of his bad movies-- Dylan Thomas' Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night. There's a challenge for you. Go back and read a text on pre-20th century poetry for more ideas and standardized forms. You'd be amazed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members PRSnotPOS Posted August 26, 2005 Members Share Posted August 26, 2005 If you want some inspiration for rhyme schemes you should listen to some 311. Songs like Homebrew, Omaha Stylee, and Hydroponic blow my mind. If you look at the lyrics and just listen to how it flows and how they break up the words... wow... just listen. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members tompetty Posted August 26, 2005 Members Share Posted August 26, 2005 Moma Drove Dad Crazy.. Moma drove Dad crazy damned near half his life she was more like a mother than a loving wife she'd rag'n nag and torture him 'till it ended in a fight Moma drove Dad crazy damned near half his life Dad cooked Sunday dinner then he cleaned up the mess he was downstairs watching football a little too happy I guess he did all that he could do as far as I could see then Moma came thumping downstairs said pay some attention to me Dad came home from work one day and she met him at the door she was red faced and cussin' he didn't know what for she said I hate my life and I wish that I was dead Dad smiled at me,pulled a gun and shot her through the head I went up to the prison there was a question I had to ask the guard sat him down across from me and said son make it fast I said Daddy are you happy now? or are you sorry for what you did? then I seen a twinkle in his eye on his face a big old grin He said life's been hard on me son but I don't think about the past Moma's gone and I'm in here Hell No,I'm free at last... :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members MikeLewisMusic Posted September 1, 2005 Members Share Posted September 1, 2005 I agree with Deef--Don't worry about the rhyming. Make the words lyrical and meaningful (you have to define what that means, because me and the rest of this crowd sure as hell don't know for your songs), and it'll be great. Sometimes as you tweek, rhymes will work their way in. Sometimes they won't. Screw it. The most recurring criticism I've received of my writing is "traditional rhymes." Don't try too hard--I did, got hammered for it, learned a lesson and moved on. As the youngest of four, I found that easiest lessons were learned at the expense of others. Learn from my mistakes, be better without taking the hit personally. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Dr. Tweedbucket Posted September 1, 2005 Members Share Posted September 1, 2005 Originally posted by fastplant I can't seem to not write in ABAB style lately. Like: I like pie why don't you give it a try you'll like it too ...type stuff Every song of mine follows the same pattern, and not intentionally, it just keeps ending up like that. What are some other cool rhyme schemes? Pie in your face You're such a disgrace Cake on your head Kickin you outta bed Pigs in the garage Paint on my Dodge Racers with wings on the fly Gravy soup in your eye Ramble zone tweeker mat Rough and ready plastic hat Standing up on the World's stage Pointed pie crust electric rage Grabba dollar ding dong Play me a sad, sad song Grabba silver spoon spork fork I like a good roasted ball of pork Nevertheless, it's turning blue It's fake but sort of true Roger thiis and copy that Let me paint green your cat Let me paint green your cat ohhhh baby, baby !! OOooOOWwwww !!! Let me paint green your stupid CAT Look ! I just want to paint your cat green! ....sorry if I wasted your time Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members PRSnotPOS Posted September 1, 2005 Members Share Posted September 1, 2005 LMAO TWEED that was great. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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