Members mystixboi1 Posted September 17, 2007 Members Share Posted September 17, 2007 A while ago I wrote this song for my GF. I did this all at my home studio in a 4 hour time frame. I finally mixed everything yesterday and this is the first bit that I mixed. For the keys and strings, I used an Alesis QS 8.2. For the dirty guitars, I used my Carvin CT3 into my line 6 POD XT Live into my mbox. For the acoustics and vox I used an Audio Techinica AT2020 condenser mic into a Presonus TUBE Preamp into the mbox. Girl Next Doorhttp://users.bandzoogle.com/johnmendoza/media/mp3/02-Girl-Next-Door-first-mix.mp3 Thanks in advance!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members mystixboi1 Posted September 18, 2007 Author Members Share Posted September 18, 2007 anyone? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members bluesway Posted September 18, 2007 Members Share Posted September 18, 2007 at this point, i've listened to this about five times...... okay......i'm going to be straight with you: i didn't review this tune b/c i had a hard time with it. i think your other song was exponentially better in quality. all of what i'm about to say, of course, is just taste-based....there is no authority in music writing, so don't take what i say as anything more than some loser's $ 0.02. the first thing that turned me off was that you matched the vocal melody with the piano line in the verse.....not that that's always a bad idea, but in this case, it was a little too Air Supply B-side for me. i justed wanted counter-melody and i got unison. lyrically, i wasn't too moved, either. i don't if it's my fault taste-wise or your fault, but i generally don't get very much out of a love song like this. there was no cleverness in the lyrical hook.....no play in the verses...it's not a bad thing, but i just feel like it's been done and done and done again. that said, i look for love songs that say something in a new way....or even in an old way, but with new images ("the luckiest" by ben folds comes to mind....google the lyrics, if you can) the super-soaked guitar solo with harmony and no drumming over the piano and string synth pad was not a big point of appeal for me, either. i'm not expecting big-budget sound here, but i feel like the song was overproduced- even without the drums. a tune like this always done better UNDER-produced......i'd lose alot of the 'extras' and try to minimalize it more - make it intimate; not showy. all in all, i would try revisiting this with new ears and perhaps a bit more lyrical images.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members mystixboi1 Posted September 18, 2007 Author Members Share Posted September 18, 2007 whoa... thanks for the constructive criticism. i'll need a few moments to respond though. haha Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Chicken Monkey Posted September 18, 2007 Members Share Posted September 18, 2007 The player cuts off after the first few notes for me. Looks like Bluesway got to it, but I can't. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Hamhand Posted September 19, 2007 Members Share Posted September 19, 2007 Gotta agree, a bit over produced for what should be a simple song, IMHO (or was it his?). Keep working, don't be discouraged by constructive criticism, it may just take you where you are going anyway. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members lyyky Posted September 19, 2007 Members Share Posted September 19, 2007 I'd like to hear it about 15-20 bpm faster. It bored me a bit, but I think it might be good at a faster tempo. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ido1957 Posted September 19, 2007 Members Share Posted September 19, 2007 The only down side is the verse, and I'm not sure what exactly I'm looking for....it just lacks some pizzazz (sp?). The chorus is fine as is. I wonder if drums would make this a bit more dynamic. It's actually one of very few songs with no drums that I've heard lately, so it's kind of a interesting difference. I actually think the mix is great.... The arrangement on the chorus is really cool - vocally superb. Guitar break w/harmonies is cool. I don't think this is over-produced... I think it's well produced (*ducks from flamers). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members eagle1 Posted September 19, 2007 Members Share Posted September 19, 2007 Hello mystixboi1 I believe the song is well structured and crafted and alsothe recording is very nicely done (well balanced). But really... I lost intereston the first 30 seconds. I found it monotonous and it kind of reminded me of an old Richard Marx song... Right Here Waiting... I did liked the chorus and the harmonies! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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