Members Z-Mann Posted September 6, 2009 Members Share Posted September 6, 2009 Hey guys (and girls?), I'm stuck on a lyric and I'm looking for general feedback. The last line of the bridge is a little bit of a sticking point. I've tried a bunch of ideas and nothing feels quite right yet. Sometimes when I come here and start typing out a post I answer my own question, so here goes. I know that just reading lyrics is completely different from hearing them with music, but it's really a conceptual thing I'm trying to work out here. Thanks for any input - no wrong answers or opinions here! Heartbreaker The color's gone out of your eyes, no they just don't shine like they used to Those cold hearted strip clubs and whiskey haven't done any good If I took you out of this place for an hour or two would it matter? Those long Friday nights never turn out the way that they should It's a heartbreaker It's the wrong way to take it You can't lose what you can't find You float just like a leaf through the wind All of the stars in the night, yeah they drift though the skies of the summer And twist into shapes just like dreams you can't seem to remember And all of your mountains have gone to the cool blue hands of the water You've drifted for days but you just can't seem to forget her It's a heartbreaker Its the wrong way to take it You can win you can lose you can lie but you can never forget Does anybody know, is somebody out there? Does anybody know, can somebody see? Does anybody know, could somebody tell me? ???????????????? It's a heartbreaker It's the wrong way to take it You can't lose what you can't find You float just like a leaf through the wind Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LetsJet Posted September 6, 2009 Members Share Posted September 6, 2009 Does anybody know, can somebody care? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members chriscarnucci Posted September 6, 2009 Members Share Posted September 6, 2009 Does anybody know, is somebody out there?Does anybody know, can somebody see?Does anybody know, could somebody tell me,if this is the way it must be? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members chriscarnucci Posted September 7, 2009 Members Share Posted September 7, 2009 Does anybody know, is somebody out there?Does anybody know, can somebody see?Does anybody know, could somebody tell me,just how he's suposed to break free. or... How he's suposed to break free? (depending on the meter) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members nuclear arsenal Posted September 7, 2009 Members Share Posted September 7, 2009 Does anybody know, is somebody out there?Does anybody know, can somebody see?Does anybody know, could somebody tell me?I like raspberry jelly Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Z-Mann Posted September 7, 2009 Author Members Share Posted September 7, 2009 Hmmm, I like the word "free" chriscarnucci. I may work with that. Although raspberry jelly is hard to pass up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members psychedelica Posted September 7, 2009 Members Share Posted September 7, 2009 Does anybody know, is somebody out there?Does anybody know, can somebody see?Does anybody know, could somebody tell me?Does anybody know a love that can be Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted September 7, 2009 Members Share Posted September 7, 2009 Does anybody know, is somebody out there?Does anybody know, can somebody see?Does anybody know, could somebody tell me?Please! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Z-Mann Posted September 7, 2009 Author Members Share Posted September 7, 2009 Does anybody know, is somebody out there?Does anybody know, can somebody see?Does anybody know, could somebody tell me?Please! Oh {censored} Lenny I think you hit the nail on the head. I'm not being sarcastic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LeonardScaper Posted September 7, 2009 Members Share Posted September 7, 2009 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members easilyspooked Posted September 8, 2009 Members Share Posted September 8, 2009 +1 Please could get some great vocal accenting going on with such a simple turn of phrase Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Boydog Posted September 9, 2009 Members Share Posted September 9, 2009 leave it to the guys who are good to come up with the best Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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