Members Bright_Midnight Posted February 8, 2010 Members Share Posted February 8, 2010 got another one for you guys, called "la minuit". any feedback is appreciated! http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8695521 lyrics: connect the points ahead with fingers on the bed to start the scene i'm focused on your eyes and i know that you're gonna give in the night becomes alive as you swoon and caress my skin we're safe inside the rain the virgin tide awaits the lovers sleeping sound below the islands on your mind we're drifting through the line a place you've never seen before i'm lost in love but drowned in lust only your face is left to touch i'm lost in love but drowned in lust only your face is left to touch i'm focused on your eyes and i know that your gonna give in there's something in the air let me know if you feel it alright Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members hogger Posted February 9, 2010 Members Share Posted February 9, 2010 I'll give this analysis thing a shot, though I feel really humbled by the advice that blue2blue, leeknight, chickenmonkey, the regulars give... I feel so unschooled when I see the type of advice that they give, but since nobody else has weighed in on this one, perhaps my advice is better than nothing. I'll just spit out what appealed to me and what didn't appeal to me about it. Didn't appeal to me: - took too long to get going, too much instrumental at the start - the moaning sounds after the 1st verse didn't do anything for me - it didn't have enough "growth" as the song went Did appeal to me: - it's got some nice grooves in it, I'd really like it if it had more of the "loud soft loud" thing going. It seems like it's got a lot of opportunity to benefit from some verses that build to a crescendo, leading into one of those nice guitar solos, and then take it back down and give the listener some time to recover. - I really like the doors, and it reminds me of the doors I don't listen to this style of music much, but I could like this song just fine. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Bright_Midnight Posted February 11, 2010 Author Members Share Posted February 11, 2010 I'll give this analysis thing a shot, though I feel really humbled by the advice that blue2blue, leeknight, chickenmonkey, the regulars give... I feel so unschooled when I see the type of advice that they give, but since nobody else has weighed in on this one, perhaps my advice is better than nothing. I'll just spit out what appealed to me and what didn't appeal to me about it.Didn't appeal to me: - took too long to get going, too much instrumental at the start - the moaning sounds after the 1st verse didn't do anything for me - it didn't have enough "growth" as the song wentDid appeal to me: - it's got some nice grooves in it, I'd really like it if it had more of the "loud soft loud" thing going. It seems like it's got a lot of opportunity to benefit from some verses that build to a crescendo, leading into one of those nice guitar solos, and then take it back down and give the listener some time to recover. - I really like the doors, and it reminds me of the doorsI don't listen to this style of music much, but I could like this song just fine. thanks for listening! the backing vox are hit and miss for people, i have had some people tell me that they love them, others say not so much. so im a little lost on those right now. part of the lack of progression is at the fault of the percussion, because of the time constraints of the recording session when we laid them down, we didnt have a clear idea of what the song would be. now i do have an idea, and it would require some tweaks in the drumming. thanks again! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members grace_slick Posted February 12, 2010 Members Share Posted February 12, 2010 I like this...it does take a while at first...but that's not to say the beginning bit is bad or un-interesting. I really like what the bass does...and the guitar that comes in around 0.40 secs. I like the lead voice when it comes in and style there...sounds Doors-like to me... The vocals that are sort of in the background seem messy to me... I really like it. I think it's got major potential, but...yes, something might want to be done to the beginning intro...not necessarily make it shorter, but something...to grasp peoples' interest earlier... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Bright_Midnight Posted February 14, 2010 Author Members Share Posted February 14, 2010 I like this...it does take a while at first...but that's not to say the beginning bit is bad or un-interesting. I really like what the bass does...and the guitar that comes in around 0.40 secs.I like the lead voice when it comes in and style there...sounds Doors-like to me...The vocals that are sort of in the background seem messy to me...I really like it. I think it's got major potential, but...yes, something might want to be done to the beginning intro...not necessarily make it shorter, but something...to grasp peoples' interest earlier... thanks for listening! glad you enjoyed it! yes, this was a first recording of it, so im sure some changes will be made when we decide to go back and fine tune it. thanks again! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Bright_Midnight Posted February 16, 2010 Author Members Share Posted February 16, 2010 any other thoughts? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members BenDuncan Posted February 18, 2010 Members Share Posted February 18, 2010 This isnt really related to song writing but i really like the way your voice sounds Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Bright_Midnight Posted February 20, 2010 Author Members Share Posted February 20, 2010 This isnt really related to song writing but i really like the way your voice sounds why thank you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rockinrobby Posted February 20, 2010 Members Share Posted February 20, 2010 Right at the very beginning, it seemed a little weird? Because it sounded like you were already playing and then someone took you off mute? (minor) I like the fretless :-) The quality of the recording could really be improved... It's actually distracting from my ability to be able to listen to and critique anything objectivly :-( I can't hear the vox (they're burried) and there's something drowning in the high end that I find anoying (personal) It's probably a ride cymbal? Sorry, I don't mean to sound harsh, it may be a great song with great performances, but from what I can hear, the recording is so weak that I can't really appreciate the other elements. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ido1957 Posted February 20, 2010 Members Share Posted February 20, 2010 Nice sort of Moody Blues vibe to your voice... I think the vocal could come forward in the mix a bit. Good song and classic vibe to it.... :):) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Bright_Midnight Posted February 20, 2010 Author Members Share Posted February 20, 2010 Nice sort of Moody Blues vibe to your voice... I think the vocal could come forward in the mix a bit. Good song and classic vibe to it.... :) :) thanks man! i really appreciate it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Bright_Midnight Posted February 21, 2010 Author Members Share Posted February 21, 2010 Right at the very beginning, it seemed a little weird? Because it sounded like you were already playing and then someone took you off mute? (minor)I like the fretless :-) The quality of the recording could really be improved... It's actually distracting from my ability to be able to listen to and critique anything objectivly :-( I can't hear the vox (they're burried) and there's something drowning in the high end that I find anoying (personal) It's probably a ride cymbal? Sorry, I don't mean to sound harsh, it may be a great song with great performances, but from what I can hear, the recording is so weak that I can't really appreciate the other elements. thanks for listening! I would try another listen, preferably a download, because it is a well done recording, at least with my minimal set up, IMO. if that doesn't change anything then, well,back to the drawing board haha Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Bright_Midnight Posted February 24, 2010 Author Members Share Posted February 24, 2010 any other thoughts? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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