Long Ride Home

[LeonardScaper]

A little assonance....a little dissonance......

 

I think I actually like the second verse better. Not quite sure yet if the story line gets across......until the very end of course, where I may owe Mr. Bowie an apology.

 

Long Ride Home

 

The stars called out this morning

From a cold sky

I could see my breath

So I knew I was still alive

It's out there in the distance

But it's not my time to go

 

And it's a long ride home

'Cause it's a long way

It's a long ride home

 

Instr.

 

Don't you ever wonder

When you lie awake at night

And don't you get that feeling

When the stars are out so bright

And when you close your eyes

Does one light shine alone

 

Well it's a long ride home

'Cause it's a long way

Yes it's a long way

[grace_slick]

Hmm. I can

[grace_slick]

Oh, now I've got a totally different image in my head...love the raspy type vocals.

 

Who does this remind me of...The Band maybe? I don't really know, but I like it a lot.

[rockinrobby]

 

A little assonance....a little dissonance......

 

 

I've had too much distonance from a little assonance for way too long...

 

I like it, I like the harmonies? But someone they seem like they're out of place in parts? The rest of the song is classic you, with the exception of some of those FX.

[LeonardScaper]

 

.......with the exception of some of those FX.

 

 

Couldn't help myself.............

 

..........looking for something spacey in the synth and was decidedly unmoved by anything. So I plugged the old SG into my Classic 30 and stuck Mr. Echo in between. All those crazy sounds went down live in one take........I kept lifting my hand off the strings and twisting the heck out of the knobs. It was great fun but I'm most likely pull most of that stuff out before this gets wrapped up.

 

I always appreciate your particular attention to harmonies as you, my friend, are quite the singer. I'll see if I can tuck them in a bit more.

 

And thank you, Grace.....glad you like it.

[LeonardScaper]

And so.......I have realized that this may be the song I have been waiting for. I remixed it last night and came away with an odd feeling of completion.

 

I do believe that I'll take a little break.

 

[Shadowdusk]

And so.......I have realized that this may be the song I have been waiting for. I remixed it last night and came away with an odd feeling of completion. I do believe that I'll take a little break.

 

Ah, that's awesome! When can we hear the final version? I never felt like I completed a song... bah, I get worked up too easily! Looking forward to hearing the song, I liked what I heard so far.

[LeonardScaper]

Hey, thanks.......I believe this may be it.

 

......at least as close as I can get it for now.

[Marshal]

Smashing, baby !

 

Couple comments. The harmonies jump on the listener uexpectedly. You might try cutting back the other voices to be more etheral background. And try to cut out the attack on "L" in "Long way" for the other voices. Let that phrase start with the solo voice, and then get reinforced by the harmony. (Other voices sing "ong way")

 

There's a mike pop in there. Cut it out.

 

The space ship stuff is a little too hokey.

 

It reminds me of Bruce Cockburn's song, "Look How Far" (That's a good thing.)

 

On this rooftop where we're sitting

In the rays of the setting sun

Glasses of wine on a crate between us

Catch the light -- seem to glow from within

 

And there's a laugh

Hanging in the air

And there's no

Desperation anywhere

 

So many miles, so many doors

Some need patience, some need force

All fall open in their own due course

To allow us this time

 

And your limned

In light, golden and thin

Looks to me

Like you're lit up from within

 

And look how far the light came

Look how far the light came

Look how far the light came

To paint you

This way

 

And I picture us in this light

Friendship a fine silver web

Stretched across golden smoky haze

And this is simple

And this is grace

 

And this light

Is a guest from far away

Passing through

The last whisper of day

 

And look how far the light came

Look how far the light came

Look how far the light came

To paint you

This way

[LeonardScaper]

There's a mike pop in there. Cut it out.

 

Excellent help there..........

 

I'll rework those harmonies. I think the 'mic pop' may be one of the odd sounds from the analog delay madness. I know that stuff is a bit hokey, but it was so much fun doing it all analog and live like that......and I think I need it to get the outlandish idea across that our friend is a space traveler who us stranded here.

 

Do we need to put up a poll?

[rockinrobby]

Do we need to put up a poll?

 

I put up a poll the other day during my TSA pat down? Total Sexual Assault! They told me I wasn't supposed to enjoy it...

[LeonardScaper]

 

They told me I wasn't supposed to enjoy it...

 

 

You, my friend, are incorrigible!

[tbry]

:D every once in a while he kills me

[blue2blue]

A little assonance....a little dissonance...... I think I actually like the second verse better. Not quite sure yet if the story line gets across......until the very end of course, where I may owe Mr. Bowie an apology. Long Ride Home The stars called out this morning From a cold sky I could see my breath So I knew I was still alive It's out there in the distance But it's not my time to go And it's a long ride home 'Cause it's a long way It's a long ride home Instr. Don't you ever wonder When you lie awake at night And don't you get that feeling When the stars are out so bright And when you close your eyes Does one light shine alone Well it's a long ride home 'Cause it's a long way Yes it's a long way

It's pretty impossible to suss out a literal meaning here (unless we're talking about David Bowie's Man Who Fell to Earth character, which, of course, is itself heavily metaphoric)...

 

... but I found the song as a whole to be both utterly compelling and with no need of explication at all.

 

 

Very nice.

[LeonardScaper]

(unless we're talking about David Bowie's Man Who Fell to Earth character, which, of course, is itself heavily metaphoric)...

 

Well....I was a bit concerned about the bit......'star man, waiting in disguise'....where I was evoking Bowie's 'There's a star man waiting in the sky'.

 

Not that I intended to do that, mind you.