Members Fig0ta Posted June 5, 2006 Members Share Posted June 5, 2006 Well i'm 15 and I decided to record this 3 songs I wrote.... Now it's nothing amazing just simple made songs that I made out of pure boredom and the notes just popped out.. I would like some opinions to know if i'm progressing... Now this isn't the typical shred type stuff this is just soft mood stuff? anyway all criticism will be appreciated http://www.yousendit.com/transfer.php?action=download&ufid=8DACC6013895987B http://www.yousendit.com/transfer.php?action=download&ufid=1EF2BE8D397A1F11 http://www.yousendit.com/transfer.php?action=download&ufid=63BC1A3F4501EB3D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members frozenbluth Posted June 5, 2006 Members Share Posted June 5, 2006 I only had time to listen to the first one, 'Lost In The West', hopefully I'll get around to listening to the others. Anyway, here goes. You're a good player, and you've got a nice sound. I like the atmospheric effect. The only problem, I think, is that compositionally, it's a bit meandering and boring. I think something like that would work really well if maybe you shortened the whole thing up a bit and it served as an interlude to a longer song. Just an idea. I could see it seguing directly into something heavier, and it'd probably be pretty cool. In conclusion, it sounds nice. ps- you might get better responses in the songwriting forum Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Fig0ta Posted June 5, 2006 Author Members Share Posted June 5, 2006 Yeah I felt like I dragged it but that's how I usually start building things. Hopefully I will add a hell of a lot more into that thing and shorten up a bit up because I usually do things like that.But thanks for the input Anymore welcome Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members HackedByChinese! Posted June 5, 2006 Members Share Posted June 5, 2006 Number one is really interesting to me; I think it would serve as a good base for a full song, but in its current state it sounds a bit simple to stand on its own. If you added vocals and a simple drum part (in terms of instrumentation), this might be a really powerful song. Oh, and take all of the effects off of the track-I think it would sound better if you just embrace the simplicity of the pure guitar sound. Numbers two and three do nothing for me. Keep at it-you've obviously got some skill, and it would be nice if you developed your ideas a bit more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members voneville Posted June 5, 2006 Members Share Posted June 5, 2006 Better then the stuff I wrote at 15. Cool man. Keep workin on it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Fig0ta Posted June 5, 2006 Author Members Share Posted June 5, 2006 Thanks for all the inputsI'm not that great at writing stuff like that but I get bored of just playing technical metal stuff and soloing for ages that I felt like doing something smooth or just different. So yeah I do need a little more work but i've only been playing for a year and a few months now...I started around the age of 14 and so.I might post some of the other stuff i'm actually better at but i'll seeAnd thanks again Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members AaronF Posted June 5, 2006 Members Share Posted June 5, 2006 It's cool you aren't trying to play your ass off. There is something to be said for simplicity, it is often overlooked. It is a nice trance. Put a melody over it and have the two lines weave in and out. Add some instrumentation and you will have a wicked song. I'm not much of a songwriter, but that first one does have plenty of potential, and imo, you already did the hard part. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Fig0ta Posted June 5, 2006 Author Members Share Posted June 5, 2006 Thanks i'm surprised more people like the first one than the second one ( the song Repeated ) which sounded more interesting to me. And the first one doesn't really have many effects just a little reverb at 4 as a little touch. Oh and the wah pedal at the beginning. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members fastsix Posted June 5, 2006 Members Share Posted June 5, 2006 Originally posted by frozenbluth I only had time to listen to the first one, 'Lost In The West', hopefully I'll get around to listening to the others. Anyway, here goes. You're a good player, and you've got a nice sound. I like the atmospheric effect. The only problem, I think, is that compositionally, it's a bit meandering and boring. I think something like that would work really well if maybe you shortened the whole thing up a bit and it served as an interlude to a longer song. Just an idea. I could see it seguing directly into something heavier, and it'd probably be pretty cool. Yep, I thought for sure at the :40 second mark when it faded out it was going to come back in heavier. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Fig0ta Posted June 5, 2006 Author Members Share Posted June 5, 2006 Heavier aye? As in stepping on the od pedal? or just adding something in the same mood but heavier and more interesting? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members id-man Posted June 5, 2006 Members Share Posted June 5, 2006 Originally posted by fastsix Yep, I thought for sure at the :40 second mark when it faded out it was going to come back in heavier. Ditto. It's a really cool effect and would have been a great intro to a slamming drive. As it played through I was imagining all sorts of heavier electric leads over it that would cresendo then come back to the quieter acoustic. Probably make a neat backing track. Going to listen to the others now. (Thanks for sharing). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Fig0ta Posted June 5, 2006 Author Members Share Posted June 5, 2006 Alright i'm going to do some leads over it. Ive been playing around with it and i've come up with some nice sounding interesting stuff. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Goldsack Posted June 5, 2006 Members Share Posted June 5, 2006 as everyone else has said about the first one, its good but add more instruments and heaviness! but its sounding good. il listen to the others in a sec Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Goldsack Posted June 5, 2006 Members Share Posted June 5, 2006 the first one could end up as something quite Sir Noodles-esque dont you reckon? the second one, i basically have the same comment as the first, not so much with it as a segue for a heavy part but more just with a lead over the top The third one is nice, try working some backing out for it. i particularly liked the bit in the middle they all have potential dude, just keep at it, keep practicing and experimenting with multi-tracking Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Tonemeister87 Posted June 5, 2006 Members Share Posted June 5, 2006 what ever floats your boat Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Fig0ta Posted June 6, 2006 Author Members Share Posted June 6, 2006 I said I would post a clip of what I usually play and opinions would be great on this one too. Here's a random cliphttp://www.megaupload.com/?d=1C7P7UU3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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