Members Swingfinger Posted May 27, 2013 Members Share Posted May 27, 2013 http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=555167&songID=12339642The quality of the recording is pretty low but any ideas on how the lyrics melody or song structure could be improved would be appreciatedBeautiful Doubt Verse 1It's human nature to seekand question the truths that we hold so deeplyWhen easy answers turn to steelThat spark of curiousity is killed ChorusThe more we knowThe less we knowIt is beautiful to doubtSo let your wallsCrumble and Falland the truth will be let outIt is beautiful to doubt Verse 2Ideas that can't be scrutinized are weakThey promote division without fear of critiqueand minds built with stone and painted glassGive refuge to ideas best left in the past ChorusThe more we knowThe less we knowIt is beautiful to doubtSo let your wallsCrumble and Falland the truth will be let outIt is beautiful to doubt BridgeThat's not to say I can't understandWhy you believe what you believeIt's comfortable such confidencedon't want to seebut look inside that rising doubtshall set you freeThose trembling wordsa fledgling birda planted seed ChorusThe more we knowThe less we knowIt is beautiful to doubtSo let your wallsCrumble and Falland the truth will be let outIt is beautiful to doubt Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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Members Oswlek Posted May 27, 2013 Members Share Posted May 27, 2013 I like it. I wasn't as bothered as Nat by the bridge/chorus transition, though I can hear a quick three note ascending guitar line that might smooth the connection.Personally, I wanted more of this:and minds built with stone and painted glassGive refuge to ideas best left in the pastand less of this:Ideas that can't be scrutinized are weakThey promote division without fear of critiqueEven though the latter is less opaque, it is more on the nose and doesn't inspire me as much. It could just be my preferences getting in the way, of course. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted May 27, 2013 Members Share Posted May 27, 2013 Oswlek wrote: I like it. I wasn't as bothered as Nat by the bridge/chorus transition, though I can hear a quick three note ascending guitar line that might smooth the connection. Personally, I wanted more of this:and minds built with stone and painted glassGive refuge to ideas best left in the pastand less of this:Ideas that can't be scrutinized are weakThey promote division without fear of critiqueEven though the latter is less opaque, it is more on the nose and doesn't inspire me as much. It could just be my preferences getting in the way, of course. Yeah, I see it as a difference between concrete images and thought-based concepts. Though the song is a "thought-piece," I think it's still best to use concrete examples for your intellectual argument, a la "How many roads must a man walk down..." "How many seas must a white dove sail..." "How many times must the cannonballs fly..." and that sort of thing. Each of those sentences (lines/questions) contains 3 things: a powerful visual image, a metaphor, and a compelling bit of action.I really like the feel of this, but think you should revise the lyric a little to wrap your message around more imagery.I love the last line of the chorus, lyrically and melodically. It could stand being repeated. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted May 29, 2013 Moderators Share Posted May 29, 2013 Swingfinger wrote:http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=555167&songID=12339642The quality of the recording is pretty low but any ideas on how the lyrics melody or song structure could be improved would be appreciatedBeautiful Doubt Verse 1 It's human nature to seek and question the truths that we hold so deeplyWhen easy answers turn to steelThat spark of curiousity is killed ChorusThe more we knowThe less we knowIt is beautiful to doubtSo let your wallsCrumble and Falland the truth will be let outIt is beautiful to doubt Verse 2Ideas that can't be scrutinized are weakThey promote division without fear of critiqueand minds built with stone and painted glassGive refuge to ideas best left in the past ChorusThe more we know The less we know It is beautiful to doubt So let your walls Crumble and Fall and the truth will be let out It is beautiful to doubt BridgeThat's not to say I can't understand Why you believe what you believe It's comfortable such confidence don't want to see but look inside that rising doubt shall set you free Those trembling words a fledgling bird a planted seed Chorus The more we know The less we know It is beautiful to doubt So let your walls Crumble and Fall and the truth will be let out It is beautiful to doubt The quality of the recording is fine. Nice writing musically. Lyrically, it feels a little too precious in a Chad and Jeremy way. As mentioned, Bob would tell this story through allegory, but here you're taking the position of the seer. And that's fine, but it feels a bit dated for my taste. If it were me, and it's not, but if it were... I'd make your hook line the same as your title for starters. Beautiful Doubt. Then sing a love song to doubt. Why you love doubt, what it does for you. It allows you to question your assumptions, etc. As it stands now, it works perfectly fine, but a bit too turtleneck, horn rims and shaggy haircut, book in one hand, coffee in the other preaching to the girls. And then again, it absolutely works in that vein, so really... you might be on to something there. BTW, it has a little Tallest Man in the World vibe to it. That's a good thing in my book. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Swingfinger Posted June 9, 2013 Author Members Share Posted June 9, 2013 If anyone wants to hear it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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