So Good

[Tullsterx]

I'm working on some soul/beach music/R&B ideas for my new band SoulPlay. Here's a first stab at one:

So Good

 

[bee3]

What sort of feedback are you looking for?  You really should post the lyrics.

[Lee Knight]

The intro is GREAT! Right away... SLAM! I'm hooked. But there's an issue... you go to the 1st verse, which is good too... but you use the same rhythmic hook in your key part. You gotta drop that. There is no contrast or reason to want to listen past 10 bars or so. But...

 

...if you were to keep the verse as is but drop that rhythm and any other part supporting that same rhythm of: BAH-dut dit BAH-dut, any bass that mirrors that rhythm, etc. drop it for the verse. Even a simple pad out of Massive doing rhythmic morphing would work, with a new and cool bass part (that' different!) and you're gold. So you need to change up rhythm adn the sound. Use a different synth altogether in the verses for contrast. And that is the word... CONTRAST. You need some.

 

Then when you hit the chorus, BAM!!!!! BAH-dut dit BAH-dut

 

You got the hard part, the totally engaging hook. Now you need to devise some nice tension and release between your sections. Nice work.

 

Oh, and you need to take more time perfecting that vocal. Good singer, but there are times where it sounds... not so good. You can't let that stuff go. Be diligent and only accept the best stuff for that vocal track. The parts good, the performance goes from good to not so good. Only good allowed.