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    Oh look, this place is still here. I couldn't log in for a while, and gave up on trying to get help. Today it just worked.

    I had to do some research on sexy lingerie recently, so I could dress up a hooker. Wait, that came out wrong. The hooker is in a song I'm writing. The song isn't really about the hooker, it's about the CIA. Well, no that's not true either, the song is called CIA, it's about a hookers boyfriend. Oh nevermind.

    All I know is that I need to write more songs with hookers in them (I already have quite a few) to justify this kind of research.

    Here's where I am after a couple drunken nights. It's country. I have the beginnings of some really bad music to go with it, but nothing I'm willing to share as of yet.

    CIA.

    I've got a girlfriend, I think she's in the CIA

    She's got a dozen outfits designed to infiltrate

    A sexy school yard, or a candy stripe parade

    A convent where they all wear habits and fishnet lingerie

     

    I've got a girlfriend, I think she's in the FBI

    Every time I see her I swear she's with a different guy

    Sometimes it can be a little awkward when you are dating a super spy

    I never want to blow her cover so I just watch them passing by


    Ive got a girlfriend, I think she's in the KGB

    But I don't think Moscow sent her just to spy on me

    Whenever the phone rings she's off on a secret mission

    Usually with a Cat o' nine tails to whip the bad guys in to submission


    I've got a girlfriend, I think she's from the outer space

    You wouldn't believe the things she wears when she leaves her place

    Once she was a French maid with a garter made of lace

    Last night I caught her dressed like a Wookie with a light saber than vib-er-ates

     

    I've got a girlfriend, I think she's in the CIA


  • #2

     


    I love it - and only have one possibility to throw into the pot:

    Maybe you could throw in a little twist at the end. You've covered CIA, FBI, KGB, outer space, but what about the current hot potato?

    I was thinking of in place of your current single tie-up line, you use a couple of lines that say you're never going to be sure about your girlfriends, and maybe you need a girlfriend with the ultimate lingerie, the all-seeing lingerie, the see-through lingerie - working in the NSA (or something in that vein).

    Just a thought, but otherwise, I like the song muchly.

    'Music is your own experience, your thoughts, your wisdom. If you don't live it, it won't come out of your horn'.
    CHARLIE PARKER

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    • dramey
      dramey commented
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      At one point I was toying with the twist being that protagonist being in some top secret organization himself (NSA would be perfect) and still unable to figure out what was going on with his GF.

      To my ear the first verse sings fine. The third works but is a bit odd. I like the cat o nine tails line though. I might try to find a way to stick it in a bridge, the song needs one anyway.

  • #3

    I like it a lot.  You've got some great imaginative ideas going.  And I like the fact that you never completely spill the beans; you just leave it for the listener to figure out (which isn't difficult, but most contemporary country songwriters think their listeners can't figure this stuff out, so they just have to put a blatant "tell" at the end).

    I do have an issue with some of the rhymes, however.  Although I'm not normally a stickler for perfect rhymes, the series of "a," "ate," "ade," "a" in the first verse didn't feel quite right.  And the switch from AAAA to AABB in the third verse, then back to AAAA in the fourth, also stuck out as odd.  But maybe these things will sound o.k. when sung?

    Beware of deepities.-- Daniel Dennett

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    • LCK
      LCK commented
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      Monkey Uncle wrote: I do have an issue with some of the rhymes, however.  Although I'm not normally a stickler for perfect rhymes, the series of "a," "ate," "ade," "a" in the first verse didn't feel quite right.  And the switch from AAAA to AABB in the third verse, then back to AAAA in the fourth, also stuck out as odd.  But maybe these things will sound o.k. when sung?

      I agree. The hook for this kind of song is its cleverness. The idea is very clever. Some of the rhymes? Not so much.


  • #4
    This is really clever. I like it
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    Your god doesn't exist but my god does and he is all loving. If you disagree with me I'll kill you. - Prince Ea

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    • #5

      dramey wrote:

      Oh look, this place is still here. I couldn't log in for a while, and gave up on trying to get help. Today it just worked.


      I had to do some research on sexy lingerie recently, so I could dress up a hooker. Wait, that came out wrong. The hooker is in a song I'm writing. The song isn't really about the hooker, it's about the CIA. Well, no that's not true either, the song is called CIA, it's about a hookers boyfriend. Oh nevermind.


      All I know is that I need to write more songs with hookers in them (I already have quite a few) to justify this kind of research.


      Here's where I am after a couple drunken nights. It's country. I have the beginnings of some really bad music to go with it, but nothing I'm willing to share as of yet.


      CIA.


      I've got a girlfriend, I think she's in the CIA


      She's got a dozen outfits designed to infiltrate


      A sexy school yard, or a candy stripe parade


      A convent where they all wear habits and fishnet lingerie


       


      I've got a girlfriend, I think she's in the FBI


      Every time I see her I swear she's with a different guy


      Sometimes it can be a little awkward when you are dating a super spy


      I never want to blow her cover so I just watch them passing by



      Ive got a girlfriend, I think she's in the KGB


      But I don't think Moscow sent her just to spy on me


      Whenever the phone rings she's off on a secret mission


      Usually with a Cat o' nine tails to whip the bad guys in to submission



      I've got a girlfriend, I think she's from the outer space


      You wouldn't believe the things she wears when she leaves her place


      Once she was a French maid with a garter made of lace


      Last night I caught her dressed like a Wookie with a light saber than vib-er-ates


       


      I've got a girlfriend, I think she's in the CIA




       


      Personally, I think...


       


      CIA


      infiltrate


      stripe parade


      lingerie


       


      ...are awesome rhymes. And also...


       


      KGB


      spy on me


       


      But you go a little awry with...


       


      secret mission


      into submission


       


      Well, actually those are great too. But as others have mentioned, it feels odd breaking up the rhyme scheme. Great lines though. I hope you decide to clean up the rhyme scheme because this is going to be cool. Here's a quick stab at a couple of ideas for fun and stimulation...


       


      I've got a girlfriend, I think she's in the KGB


      But I don't think Moscow sent her just to spy on me


      Always buzzin' like a secret agent busy bee


      Mindin' other business when I wish she would be minding me


       


      Bridge


      The phone rings... she's off on a secret mission


      Cat o' nine tails... whip the bad guys into submission

      __________
      Your god doesn't exist but my god does and he is all loving. If you disagree with me I'll kill you. - Prince Ea

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