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  • Just Me and the Bottle Tonight

    Up tempo country swing a la 80's Rodney Crowell. I got the music in my head. Pretty fun I think. Let's see... 

     

    Just Me and the Bottle Tonight

     

    V1

    Holdin' you tight, swayin' to the rhythm of the band

    This moment, I swear you're my only friend

    Gonna dance with you all evening, till I can barely stand

    It's gonna take some time for this heart to mend

     

    C1

    So will you be my partner as I glide across the floor?

    Will you be there waiting... when I come back for more?

    How I wish it was her I was holdin' tight

    But, Bottle, it's just me and you tonight

    It's just me and the bottle tonight

     

    V2

    You look fetching in the shadows of the neon light

    You're every broken heart's dream come true

    You wash away my misery, make everything alright

    Come tomorrow morning, I'll have a different point of view

     

    C2

    But for tonight...

     

    Will you be my partner as I glide across the floor?

    Will you be there waiting... when I come back for more?

    How I wish it was her I was holdin' tight

    But, Bottle, it's just me and you tonight

    It's just me and the bottle tonight

    __________
    Ain't no sacrilege to call Elvis king
    Dad is great and all but he never could sing -
    Jesus

  • #2

    Holdin' you tight, swayin' to the rhythm of the band

    This moment, I swear you're my only friend  (not sure how I feel about friend.  It seems like dancing all night should be something you do with a romantic interest)

    Gonna dance with you all night, till I can barely stand 

    It's gonna take some time for this heart to mend

     

    You look fetching in the shadows of the neon light

    You're every broken hearts ed man's dream come true

    You wash away my misery, make everything alright

    Come tomorrow morning, I'll have a different point of view

     

    ...

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    • nat whilk II
      nat whilk II commented
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      for that 2nd line

       

      You're my friend, my lover, my good right hand

       

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      nat whilk ii


    • Lee Knight
      Lee Knight commented
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      Ooo, good cross out there.

       

      OK... I was hoping to conjure up the picture of a drunk cowboy, holding a long neck Bud, and spinning around the dance floor alone. Not working? I was actually picturing an old friend, the front man Country Dick Montana from Beat Farmers (Dan McClain) RIP. He always had this stage persona of a heartbroken rowdy drunk cowboy.

       

      That's what I going for. I guess the question is, how do I get there? I want it to be an "Aha!' song.

       

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  • #3

    I like it a lot.  I'm sure once it's set to music this will disappear, but it did immediately bring this tune to mind.

    Don't listen to Justin.
    LCK - 2/21/2012

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    • Lee Knight
      Lee Knight commented
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      Oswlek wrote:

      I like it a lot.  I'm sure once it's set to music this will disappear, but it did immediately bring this tune to mind.


       

      I've never heard that song. But... this is nothing new, I know. That's the idea, it is a wink-wink to honky tonk drinking songs. But I need to get the image of Dan up there in this song, spinning aroud the dance floor with a bottle of Bud.

       

      The Bon Jovi are the guilty one's there if you ask me.


  • #4

    Lee Knight wrote:

    Up tempo country swing a la 80's Rodney Crowell. I got the music in my head. Pretty fun I think. Let's see...


    I really like the general idea. I'm just having trouble with one bit of imagery: a guy dancing with a life-size bottle.

    Maybe

     

    I sure wish it was her hand I was holding so tight
    But if it's just a cold bottle of beer, then all right.
    It's me and the bottle tonight.

     

    ??

     

    “Good Vibrations” was probably a good record but who's to know? You had to play it about 90 bloody times to even hear what they were singing about. What’s next? Rock opera? —Pete Townshend, Melody Maker Interview, 1966.

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    • Lee Knight
      Lee Knight commented
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      LCK wrote:

      Lee Knight wrote:

      Up tempo country swing a la 80's Rodney Crowell. I got the music in my head. Pretty fun I think. Let's see... 

       

      Just Me and the Bottle Tonight

       

      V1

      Holdin' you tight, swayin' to the rhythm of the band

      This moment, I swear you're my only friend

      Gonna dance with you all evening, till I can barely stand

      It's gonna take some time for this heart to mend

       

      C1

      So will you be my partner as I glide across the floor?

      Will you be there waiting... when I come back for more?

      How I wish it was her I was holdin' tight

      But, Bottle, it's just me and you tonight

      It's just me and the bottle tonight

       

      V2

      You look fetching in the shadows of the neon light

      You're every broken hearted man's dream come true

      You wash away my misery, make everything alright

      Come tomorrow morning, I'll have a different point of view

       

      C2

      But for tonight...

       

      Will you be my partner as I glide across the floor?

      Will you be there waiting... when I come back for more?

      How I wish it was her I was holdin' tight

      But, Bottle, it's just me and you tonight

      It's just me and the bottle tonight


      I really like the general idea. I'm just having trouble with one bit of imagery: a guy dancing with a bottle.

      Maybe

       

      I sure wish it was her hand I was holding so tight
      But if it's just a cold bottle of beer, then all right.
      It's me and the bottle tonight.

       

      ??

       


       

      ^^^Yes ^^^ I think I can do something with that. That's awesome Mr. Kelly. I need to have the listener get a clear picture of that sad drunk oaf on the dance floor with his beer like a dance partner. Curtsying and twirling like a sad lovable fool. I'm going to try a live youtube demo tonight to run this by you guys.


  • #5
    Wtf? This is helping? Maybe it's me but I'm confused . I've picked up you don't like country, rap and brand names in songs. This is helpful? Snark
    __________
    Ain't no sacrilege to call Elvis king
    Dad is great and all but he never could sing -
    Jesus

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    • Jerry_Lev
      Jerry_Lev commented
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      Lee Knight wrote:
      Wtf? This is helping? Maybe it's me but I'm confused . I've picked up you don't like country, rap and brand names in songs. This is helpful? Snark

      I gave you a suggestion. You are rejecting it. And yet you're the only one who has a right to feel offfended?  I like some Country, but I sometimes feel that Country doesn't like me, for some reason. 

      I have nothing against Country and Rap as musical styles. Like light beer, they are very popular. My taste is irrelevant, because you are rejecting me from your potential audience. And you should,  because I'm an outlier. Your song has a beter chance of success with a larger audience as is. Please forget I offered any opinion on your lyrics, it was clearly a mistake I won't make again.

       


  • #6
    It's not 3/4 but the title has been bugging me. It lacks vim. Maybe "Dancing with the Bottle Tonight"?
    __________
    Ain't no sacrilege to call Elvis king
    Dad is great and all but he never could sing -
    Jesus

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    • oldgitplayer
      oldgitplayer commented
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      Maybe my brain is starting to work again (not guaranteed in a good way though).

      Anhow - I think your move on the title change is good. I would go one step further and imply the preposition, so you'll have , 'Dancing the bottle tonight'.


      This gives opportunities for lines like:

      'When I'm dancing the bottle tonight'

      So I'll be dancing the bottle tonight'


      See if there's any tread on these tyres.


  • #7
    I think she should call me up and explain that to me. I'm open minded
    __________
    Ain't no sacrilege to call Elvis king
    Dad is great and all but he never could sing -
    Jesus

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