lyrics check em out

I'm just posting these to make the other posters feel much better about their lyrics

So long ago I wanted a girl

Cuz I felt alone in this world

I thought I found someone

I was gonna be happy

Gonna have some fun

But Everything just went insane

If it needs to be I'll take the blame

You took things wrong

I took things right

You took things right

I took things wrong

That's why I wrote this song

My head and heart fell outta line

And It feels like I lost my mind

She said so many things to me

And I said so many things to her

She said she needed me

But she needed her pills

It's not like I know how she feels

I find some trues

You'll find some lies

I find some lies

You'll find some trues

Yeah I know your feelin blue

My head heart fell outta line

And It feels like I lost my mind

She said so many things to me

And I said so many things to her

I cant decide what

Maybe all of it's real

If it not then why does it still kill

I liked the first part but, but a lot of parts don't flow that well. At least you got through a whole song. I'm still trying to come up with lyrics.

Nobody says "feelin' blue" anymore.

I'm just sayin'.

Not a lot of time here tonight...

Suggestions for your chorus

Don't repeat so much...

You took things wrong

I took things right

Finish with something that everyone can relate to,,, one possibility,,,

You took things wrong

I took things right

You turned left

And I turned right

Then the chorus after the "she needed her pills"

I see your truth

Can't live your lies

Can't stay straight

While you do lines

It's a good start,,, Do the work !!

BubbaDman