three songs of mine

all here

http://www.thirteenbirds.com/letterb.htm

feedback would be great.

I listened to 13 birds. I hate to do this, but it needs a lot of work. The drum machine is terrible, the guitar line seems like a faux-flamenco nightmare, and the vocals are really weak. Also, there is a strange pad sound in the back that doesn't help. The song sounds decent, it just needs a makeover--I can't listen through the presentation.

i'm so sorry to say it, but i'm with chicken monkey 100% on this, man. he's right - especially about the vox. i was turned off by the drum machine thing right in the beginning. a drum machine DOESN'T make new wave, bro. check out some brian eno.

let's get positive for a sec: i do have to say, though, that i like the key change in the verse (i think it's the verse - the "blue eyed boy . . . " part.) it was refreshing from a structure point of view. you have a good idea there. lyrics, too, show there's a brain behind this; this project isn't lost.

let's get to the meat of the problem: in the vox, i think you went for too much vocal expression and it just wound up sounding a bit unconvincing and out of tune. (honestly: a bit corny) if i could offer an opinion here, it doesn't sound like you're singing with your own voice, but trying to make a "cooler-sounding" voice and it's not working. you can really hear that in the end of different words of the verse. Ex: trees outside; telling lies; basically, the way you finish each expression. (bro, i'm guilty of this sometimes, too . . . i guess that's why i [think i] can hear it)

also, the lead guitar is very stiff and amateurish. the only thing about a demo that is allowed to be amateurish is the recording. that needs to be looked at.

hope i helped.

for healing purposes, feel free to listen to my music and rip me a new one!

i agreed with the above posts at first.. but after listening to more of the song i got into it a lot more. i'd say the only prblem is with the recording.. it's not a "bad" recording necessarily but it doesnt fit your style. i think you should throw some tubes on the vox, make the drums a little bigger, and add a little bass. other than that though, a decent song