Members collectiveunconcious Posted July 1, 2002 Members Share Posted July 1, 2002 Please check out my new track and let me know what you think. I really need some feedback for this song. Please review the song for me. I would really appreciate it. "Late June" The Collective Unconscious "Late June" Chill/Ambient Thank you Cheers Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members SomeGuyNamedRob Posted July 1, 2002 Members Share Posted July 1, 2002 I like it. Very melancholy. I checked out some of your other tracks as well. The music is pretty good, but I find the song descriptions a tad pretentious at times. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members collectiveunconcious Posted July 1, 2002 Author Members Share Posted July 1, 2002 I never thought of the descriptions as pretentious before you said somthing. But now that I read them I understand what you mean. I am not really a good writer. I suck ass with words. I am going to have my freind help me with this part of my page. Thank you for your honesty. I did not mean to make the music sound better than it is or add glamour to it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members SomeGuyNamedRob Posted July 1, 2002 Members Share Posted July 1, 2002 Originally posted by collectiveunconcious I never thought of the descriptions as pretentious before you said somthing. But now that I read them I understand what you mean. I am not really a good writer. I suck ass with words. I am going to have my freind help me with this part of my page. Thank you for your honesty. I did not mean to make the music sound better than it is or add glamour to it. I didn't mean to sound insulting with that comment, so I hope I didn't offend. I just have a very low threshold for fluffy prose and overblown imagery. It's something I put to work in the lyric to my song "Hipster For A Day." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members collectiveunconcious Posted July 2, 2002 Author Members Share Posted July 2, 2002 I was not insulted at all. I actually appreciate it cause nobody usually replies to my posts. I post my songs here with hopes that someone will give me some advise or just some plain old constructive criticism. And you did. Thank you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Death Requisite Posted July 2, 2002 Members Share Posted July 2, 2002 Listening now, halfway through. I definatley prefer this to some of the static/ empty space/ distorted human voice ambient songs I have been exposed to latley. You wouldnt happen to be a Talbot fan would you? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members kevinjDBK Posted July 16, 2002 Members Share Posted July 16, 2002 Nice arrangement..very colorful..what are you using to program the drums? (mainly the afex twin/squarepusher zipper thing) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members collectiveunconcious Posted July 16, 2002 Author Members Share Posted July 16, 2002 Originally posted by kevinjDBK Nice arrangement..very colorful.. what are you using to program the drums? (mainly the afex twin/squarepusher zipper thing) Thank you for the Compliments. It is kind of a trick that I figured out on my own, I would be happy to tell you but not posted here I don't want the secret to spread to much. But if you e-mail me at sstrong@reptilian.org I will tell you. Kinda Jerry Rigged though you might laugh.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members mrtasty Posted July 16, 2002 Members Share Posted July 16, 2002 OK, Here's what I think. 1. The intro is way too long...I know it's an ambient piece, but the lack of melody in the beginning gave me nothing to "hook" onto to get drawn in. It was cool for about 20-30 seconds, and then after that, I was ready for the song to move on. 2. You seem to have a knack for utilizing effects in your songs - do more of that. Filter sweeps, swells, all of that stuff is good when not overdone, and is very effective at keeping the listener interested. This is where ambient gets hard. It's like background music for the foreground, you know? You've got to write melodically, but still within the bounds of the ambient realm...too much, and you're techno. 3. More melody. I know I already said this, but it needs more melodies. I need a reason to keep listening, and chords won't do it for me. Melody is the tour guide through a peice of music that guides you through different emotions and moods. In ambient music, without a strong melody, you're just listening to chords over a drum track, and anybody can do that. So, that's all I have to offer for now. I know how it is trying to get critiques of your stuff. I've been trying on this board for a few weeks now trying to get people to listen but not everyone has the time. I'll make it (as long as you want it), out of respect for my fellow writers. If you'd like, tell me what you think of my stuff. My band's music is here: http://www.mp3.com/joshgoodeband and my home produced stuff is here: http://www.mp3.com/mrtasty It's not ambient, and it's not electronic, but you may get a feel for where I'm coming from. I do write ambient music, but not enough for me to justify putting a site up just yet. Thanks, and keep writing! - J Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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