Members cool_E Posted July 12, 2002 Members Share Posted July 12, 2002 The book is: "Writing Better Lyrics" by Pat Pattison BTW there are 19 Chapters... ----------------- Chapter 8 Pat has explainde and shown in previous chapters that verse development is very important and that a song'sverses will add color to the chorus. As each verse sayssomething different the chorus is heard in a differentlight each time. In this chapter Pat explains that sometimes choruses resist "coloring." He provides some insight into makingyour choruses "neutral" so that they can work withthe various verses. Pat say that you can neutralize a chorus by neutralizingit's tense and point of view. Controlling verbs is the key to controlling tense. Pat says that using the "ing" form of the verb, using the"to" form of the verb or omiting the verb altogether willwork. He uses this example: He lost the human race (past) He loses the human race (present) He'll lose the human race (future) Neutralized: Losing the human race or To lose the human race Pat provides a lyric example that illustrates how theneutral form of the chorus works better with a widearray of verse tenses and points of view. Pat then goes through a similar exercise using point of view. I lose the human race (1st person) You lose the human race (2nd person) She loses the human race (3rd person) Neutralized: Losing the human race or To lose the human race Pat uses Paul Simon's "Still Crazy After All These Years"as an example of a neutral refrain that works with 3verses with different points of view. ------------------------Exercise: Write a neutral chorus If you can't come up with one of your own then neutralizethis: I search for the good stuffI hope I can find enoughI'm ready for love Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Fourth Floor Posted July 15, 2002 Members Share Posted July 15, 2002 You could argue that including the verb keeps your lyric direct and immediate, rather than vague and generalised. Why exactly does Pat want to neutralise lyrics like this? So they work with verses? So your chorus should be neutral and your verses develop? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members cool_E Posted July 16, 2002 Author Members Share Posted July 16, 2002 4th, What Pat illustrates in the book is that the verse "colors" the chorus. Each verse, assuming there is movement from verse to verse, makes the listenerperceive the chorus in a slightly different way.Pat shows through example that neutralizingthe chorus/refrain will allow it to work with theverse even if the verse changes tense or POV.This allows more freedom of movement in the verse for the writer. Here's an example Pat uses in the book... Exploding from the starting blocksAgain he set the paceThough he was crowned by laurel wreathsAs thousands cheered he came to griefHe lost the human race It's hard to see through miles aheadTo shoulders bent by ageWith crowds of whispers drawing tightHe'll tilt his head one final nightHe lost the human race work! It doesn't match the previous line. Pat changes the refrain in the second verse to:He'll lose the human raceAnd then he explains that changing the chorus/refrainshould be avoided in most situations. Now try the above verses with this neutralizedchorus: Losing the human race It works and even adds to the effect of the lyric. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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