Members IHATEMUSIC Posted July 19, 2002 Members Share Posted July 19, 2002 just wrote this one last week. let me know what you think Verse 1bobby and jan are packin' their bagsthey're eatin' rock candy; they're runnin' awayjan turns to bobby and she hears him say Verse 2jan and bobby are out in the roadjean jacket cool; quiet, tired, and stonedbobby looks at jan and jan is lookin' away Chorusblast off honey we'll take to the skiesskin glows pink; lights shine in our eyesblast off honey we'll take to the skiesand when they write about us it won't be nuthin' but lies Bridge Chorus Verse 3gotta keep movin'; movin' leavin' this place4 am's cold; sneakers missing a lacebobby looks to jan, jan ain't got no face Ending Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members bulldawgu812 Posted July 19, 2002 Members Share Posted July 19, 2002 i think that is a good song.... i dont quite understand the no face deal, but i am sure it has some meaning and im too vain to understand it. Trent Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members JSimms Posted July 19, 2002 Members Share Posted July 19, 2002 Country song? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members DrummerBoy Posted July 20, 2002 Members Share Posted July 20, 2002 Originally posted by dmattrape just wrote this one last week. let me know what you thinkVerse 1bobby and jan are packin' their bagsthey're eatin' rock candy; they're runnin' awayjan turns to bobby and she hears him sayVerse 2jan and bobby are out in the roadjean jacket cool; quiet, tired, and stonedbobby looks at jan and jan is lookin' awayChorusblast off honey we'll take to the skiesskin glows pink; lights shine in our eyesblast off honey we'll take to the skiesand when they write about us it won't be nuthin' but liesBridgeChorusVerse 3gotta keep movin'; movin' leavin' this place4 am's cold; sneakers missing a lacebobby looks to jan, jan ain't got no faceEnding I like it it just fine I see Fatboy Slim doin the music! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members IHATEMUSIC Posted July 20, 2002 Author Members Share Posted July 20, 2002 glad you like it. it's just a loud/soft rock song with and echo-y, lou-reedy verse and a loud nirvana/pixies-esque chorus. the no face deal was actually what came off the top of my head @ practice when the original lyric didn't fit (it wasn't particularly good). I think it adds a bit of paranoic creep to the song as well as suggesting that these two kids running off to take on the world together don't have well-formed identities and don't necessarily know each other that well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members devilboy Posted July 21, 2002 Members Share Posted July 21, 2002 Good job--I like it a lot. V1 & 2 pull you in nicely and the chorus is great. V3 seems a little rushed and a bit cliche with the movin' leavin' 4am lines, but is solid on the sneaker lace and jan ain't got no face. I think I'd like it better with just the last two lines rhyming. It's very good as is though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Bossa Posted July 22, 2002 Members Share Posted July 22, 2002 Okay, but when Bobby looks at Jan does she really have no face, like maybe it was ripped off by some crazy farmer with a scythe? Or would this be more of an instance of ''eyes without a face,'' like Billy Idol might have said once. And if Jan has no face, she is going to need a hospital fast, and you'll probably need another verse about that. Interesting little twist on what looks a little like Mellencamp's Jack and Diane... subsitute rock-candy for chili dog. You'll need an acapella part about being sixteen in the Bible Belt to give it that real American feel. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members IHATEMUSIC Posted July 22, 2002 Author Members Share Posted July 22, 2002 it does play like a darker version of jack and diane doesn't it? oh well, it think that the sonic youth like bridge/solo will make it different enough. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Deryck Posted July 22, 2002 Members Share Posted July 22, 2002 It's sad, but it's cool, although I'm not into Grunge...that should be grunge, shouldn't it? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members irishmike68 Posted July 23, 2002 Members Share Posted July 23, 2002 She has no face could lend itself to the expression "losing face" meaning she has lost her pride or her reputation has taken a blow. Is she a good girl with a bad guy? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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