Members bulldawgu812 Posted July 21, 2002 Members Share Posted July 21, 2002 hey this is my friends song, his computer is jacked up so he wanted me to put it on here to see what yall think. here it is. You left me, my lifes never been the sameMy life feels like its gone up in flamesyoU were the one, one for meNow I dont know what to do How can I live without you When I hear your name I run awayI still think about you every nite and dayI see you wit him I dont kno what to say My friends say everythings gonna be ok but they dont understand how I feelI wish my this life im livin isnt realI wish i was the man that was in your dreamsbut im just a guy to you that it seems you dont even look at me ne moreyou were the one that i lived fornow that I dont have you what am i gonna do I fell in love wit you I see you with your friends havin a good timeI wish i my life would endI get chills up my spinepeople say everything gonna b fine but they dont understand how i feelI think Im goin crazy, how can this belivin life without the girl of my dreamsIm addicted to your love I cant live without you, please dont leaveI cant believe that I lost youWhat am I going to doI cant go on living my life without you I thought god sent you for mebut now all i see , if my life goin downhillWhat do you want me to fulfill?Your dreams?Your fantasiesYou tell me because Id do anything for you girl,I would die for you, take all the pain in your life but you dont want anythign to do with meyou just used me like a treecut me down, and shipped me offwhy do you put me through this misery? Im losin controleverything in my mind has gone dullI live like a blind man , lost and confusedtrying to find my way back to you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Six String Stuntman Steve Posted July 21, 2002 Members Share Posted July 21, 2002 Originally posted by bulldawgu812 trying to find my way back to you I think this is the most beautiful line in the song....just MHO. -Nigel Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Six String Stuntman Steve Posted July 21, 2002 Members Share Posted July 21, 2002 I dunno...it comes across to me as a rap song....and the picture I get is a guy with baggy jeans looking real angst-ridden and ready to kill this girl's new lover. I think chopping out some of the examples (especially "use me like a tree") would make it less......err....childish?? Sorry.-Nigel Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members WattsUrizen Posted July 22, 2002 Members Share Posted July 22, 2002 Originally posted by bulldawgu812 you just used me like a treecut me down, and shipped me off This line is, well, laughable at best. Granted, it's original. But silly. There's too much storytelling. He's very plain in his explanation of his emotion. It needs to be more poetic and metaphoric. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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