Members tcwarren1 Posted August 1, 2002 Members Share Posted August 1, 2002 When forever is too long, but it's all, I want I turn to youRacing in my head the questions that were said I've fallen throughThe mind of my own the dreams that are gone, I have nothing left but youThe eyes of the one the dreams that have become my realityAre turning round my head filling me again until it's all I see I need this nowComing up from downI think its happening againI can't be here nowBut I've go to some howGet those thoughts out of my head A little ray of light drew me into youForgotten what's around and I am completely consumedWith the thought of nothing elseYou've dragged me out of this wellAnd held me where I need to be. BridgeDon't stop wishing in the wishing wellOne day you pulled me out where I fellAnd I can't get over youCan't get over you Solo I need this nowComing up from downI can't stop it from happening againI can't see you now But I've go to some howGet back to you I need this nowI'm coming up from downI've been pushed aroundBut now I've found My life is right here with youRight here with you What do you think? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members tcwarren1 Posted August 1, 2002 Author Members Share Posted August 1, 2002 nobody has an opinion? Is it that bad? I thought they were okay. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members bulldawgu812 Posted August 1, 2002 Members Share Posted August 1, 2002 i loved this line "A little ray of light drew me into youForgotten what's around and I am completely consumed" the song is great, but it doesnt seem to flow well, that could be fixed by just changing a few words here and there Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members tcwarren1 Posted August 2, 2002 Author Members Share Posted August 2, 2002 I actually wrote it at work and did not have a guitar in front of me, and haven't really spent time working it out. but thanks for the input Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members mojowilder Posted August 2, 2002 Members Share Posted August 2, 2002 i like the bit about pulling you out of a wishing well...nice image, but then you go into a cliche "can't get over you" and I agree that some of it doesn't seem to flow well...it seems like a rough draft more than a finished product, but has some nice potential....in my expert and internationally regarded opinion;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members electricmel Posted August 2, 2002 Members Share Posted August 2, 2002 You can't knock the theme of the lyrics. It could go well with some pleasant music. The words aren't very complex and the imagery is plain. But that is not a bad thing! Especially if it fits the "tone" of the music... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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