Members ClusterOne Posted August 3, 2002 Members Share Posted August 3, 2002 I welcome any and all criticism unless you're just going to say my lyrics are sappy and contrived simply because some of them deal with love. I noticed that happens alot to people who post their lyrics. So if my rythym sucks, my rhyme sucks, or my lyrics just suck, let me know. But be honest. take it easy! ------------------------------------------- Take Me Back I wish things could be different she said under her breath again and everything you say to me I hope it comes true hope it comes true once she asked me if I believed in the stories we were given and when I told her that I did I know she knew I lied know she knew I lied shut off the light and wait by the telephone you never know, she just might call and the cold isn't why you're shiverin' it's the rain against the door the rain against the door would you sit with me and taste the rain until it drives us both insane? till it takes us back, till it takes us back till it takes us back, will you take me back? would you lay with me and watch the sky until the sun stops being shy till it watches back, till it watches back till it watches back, will you take me back? I slipped down I slipped down. my head aches from all this my feet ache from all this walking around. ---------------------------------------------------- Something Hidden you have something hidden under all that makeup oh, what could it be? what could it be? you have something hidden under all those smiles what could it be? could it be me? you won't find any answers on your shoes don't think I don't see I could always see True, your disguise has worked out so far but it's wearing thin it's wearin thin why didn't you tell me? why didn't you tell me? I could have helped you but I didn't know locked yourself in and swallowed the key how could you keep me out? sad. thats what I think when you laugh out loud oh my darlin, you've cried it's even worse you've lied to me, and maybe even to yourself all that's good in your was slain while the darkest parts remain why didn't you tell me? why didn't you tell me? I could have helped you but I didn't know wishing on stars that died long ago you should have wished on me ------------------------ Anyway, hope you enjoyed them, and/or have some comments/suggestions/criticisms. Take it easy Steve-o Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members WattsUrizen Posted August 4, 2002 Members Share Posted August 4, 2002 would you lay with me and watch the skyuntil the sun stops being shy This line is really good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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