Members Deryck Posted August 16, 2002 Members Share Posted August 16, 2002 ...but NO, Anomandaris won't get a dollar, because it's no Lovesong! (Sorry, Pal. ) Okay. short story: I know a girl, and I *hate* her. I don't mean *like*, I really mean *hate*. Yes, some might say "Woah, isn't that a little bit fast? Hate's such a destructive emotion..." Yes, it is. But so's the girl. And not only I feel this way, also MANY people I know agree with me on this topic. She's cold, and she has no heart. End of topic. It has some clich Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members WattsUrizen Posted August 17, 2002 Members Share Posted August 17, 2002 Originally posted by Deryck ...but NO, Anomandaris won't get a dollar, because it's no Lovesong! (Sorry, Pal. ) Doh! There's some very good parts, and others not so good. However, for your intentions, I think it suits quite well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Deryck Posted August 17, 2002 Author Members Share Posted August 17, 2002 Okay...I'm just curious...which parts aren't good? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members WattsUrizen Posted August 18, 2002 Members Share Posted August 18, 2002 I don't like the repetition of single sentences. It annoys me. But that might just be me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members eagle1 Posted August 18, 2002 Members Share Posted August 18, 2002 I think it looks good.!The only thing I don't like (and that I hate a lot) is the chorus: a one liner.... I hate choruses with just one line.! It gets repetitive but there are some good songs with single line choruses too so... it's just my opinion anyway! I can already listen to it with a pop-emoesque style like A New Found Glory or something.! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Deryck Posted August 18, 2002 Author Members Share Posted August 18, 2002 @Daris Really? Well, I kind of like repeating sentences if it fits the song...the thing I hate is when someone repeats exactly single phrases over and over...expect the Chorus, of course! @eagle Oh dude, I see, we're different...I dig one-liner-choruses...first of all because it fits the melody I have in mind, and second...I couldn't think of a good second line... Any suggestions? But thanks for your replies! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members WattsUrizen Posted August 18, 2002 Members Share Posted August 18, 2002 IMO, continuous and unbroken repetition of a single line just sounds like an advertising slogan, rather than a song lyric. But it's your song, so go with it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Deryck Posted August 18, 2002 Author Members Share Posted August 18, 2002 YOu mean? Oh {censored}...well, then check out please the next song I'll post, okay...it has the same thing...maybe it fits better... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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