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It's another song I wrote...


Deryck

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...could you check it out, please?

 

Okay, first of all, the standard "How I came up with the Idea"- Part...

 

 

There are three reasons/inspirations that convinced me to write this song:

 

1.) Everclear's "One Hit Wonder", which I think is a really great song.

2.) My Friends Karin and Friedi, both looking really gorgeous, but still thinking they're fat and ugly and youhaventseenit etc...

3.) Guttermouth's "Looking Good Is All That Matters"...

 

The song's called Drop Dead Gorgeous...here we go...

 

[Verse]

Look at all these girls up on the catwalk

Smiling and shining at any costs

The crowd's a flashing, hunting deadly hawk

Looking for something that could ruin the illusion

It's the nightmare yet the dream of this girl named Susan.

 

[Verse]

Susan was the star at her high school

Living and enjoying all the easy life

She owned everything and everyone

She was the glowing part of this illusion

At her school where they loved the girl named Susan.

 

[Verse]

Now she steps out into this spotlight world

Doing everything the hawk expects

From this smiling shining beautiful little girl

The hawk cheers up to this illusion

They love the image, but nobody loves Susan.

 

[Verse]

She thought she'd be ready for the action

In a world where the pretty girl is queen

In a world where beauty and money are the main religion

Till nobody on earth looked through the illusion

Especially not the girl they had named Susan.

 

[breakdown]

Not the girl named Susan...

Not the girl named Susan...

 

[bridge]

She's happy like she hasn't been since a long time ago

But she still doesn't seems to know

That everyone can buy her cute soul

At the next dirty convienence store!

 

[Verse]

Now we forward to a few months later

Susan's not the shining star anymore

Now she smells like Christian Slater

She finally ruined her fine illusion

She can't see that she's still the girl named Susan.

 

[interlude]

Everyone seems to forgot how they loved Susan

Everyone seems to forgot how she made them happy

Everything happened just for the illusion

Everyone forgot about Susan although she's still so pretty

 

[bridge]

She's happy like she hasn't been since a long time ago

But she still doesn't seems to know

That everyone can buy her cute soul

At the next dirty convienence store!

 

[Ending, quiet]

They say she's drop dead gorgeous

Susan just wants to drop dead on the floor...

 

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wow! i love the message and the song. the only thing i think could use some work is like the 4th verse, and maybe a little bit in the other ones too. they have a lot of story telling, and not a lot of imagery. but if u dont want to mess with it then dont, cuz that is fine how it is... especially depending on the music. awesome writing!

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