Members negative sleep Posted September 2, 2002 Members Share Posted September 2, 2002 so i overdosed on oxygen- comatose she laughed and said she told me so,couldnt start to stop breathing- dont you want me?and off we went to stare into-a brilliant beings fragile hand,fooled again she laughed and said she told me so silver coil evaporate, enamorate, rebornshallow soul respirate, epitome adorned lackluster....follow me if you want me...follow me if you want to be...follow me when youre ready for..the brilliant idols fragile fingers if i believed i was lost i would pull over...pull me over comments etc. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members RckStr585 Posted September 2, 2002 Members Share Posted September 2, 2002 OK, I really was drawn into that. I think my mouth was open. Its not a masterpiece, but its quite good. You're style is just, very unique. Maybe its the lack of stanza and structure, but whatever it is, its awesome. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members negative sleep Posted September 2, 2002 Author Members Share Posted September 2, 2002 well, there kind of is a format to it, works well with its accompanying music. thanks a lot for the compliment, i was expecting nothing but ridicule from this forum as they are always mean Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Deryck Posted September 2, 2002 Members Share Posted September 2, 2002 The words are cool, but I don't get the rhythm... Keep up the good Work! P.S.: I like your nick! Might use it for my band... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members WattsUrizen Posted September 2, 2002 Members Share Posted September 2, 2002 Originally posted by negative sleep well, there kind of is a format to it, works well with its accompanying music. thanks a lot for the compliment, i was expecting nothing but ridicule from this forum as they are always mean Your lyrics are {censored}house! Actually, they're quite nice, with some interesting imagery and strong metre. But we're mean, so I shouldn't be telling you this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members TheTripster Posted September 3, 2002 Members Share Posted September 3, 2002 I like those lyrics, I see how people might think they don't have much rythm, but it really sounds like the music would compliment them very nicely. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Wayrockin1 Posted September 3, 2002 Members Share Posted September 3, 2002 Very interesting and creative stuff! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Recommended Posts
Archived
This topic is now archived and is closed to further replies.