A good start? what do you think?

[mhal73]

I'm trying to write my first song and put some thoughts together let me know what you think so far? Sorry that it is not complete but it nice to get some opinions. Thanks

 

 

Verse:

 

Here we are together again

Forget about the past

Want to make a new beginning?

This time make it last

Hard to say where it began

Better hurry before we part again

 

Chorus:

 

Threw thick or thin

Let

[Jordan]

Chorus is perfect for the fast pace feeling of the song... verses could use a tweek. But good start? Yes.

 

"But hurry before we part again"

 

I would work with that, doesn't flow.

 

Good job

[mhal73]

Thanks I'll see what else I can do with the verse. I really wasn't sure about it also. It's hard because you hear a artist put together lyrics that don't seem to flow and end up making it work. How I have no Idea, but I guess that's why they are making the big bucks. hehehe

 

Thanks again