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Some Old lyrics for you to crit please


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Just 3 old ones that I wondered what you thought of:

 

MONEY

 

Watch them fall

One by one

No-one cares

No-one dares to speak a word

 

Their masters use them, money

Blood skin, all they need

All they want, money

 

{censored} their lives

Not wanted

Not needed but do they care?

No use to our world

Money

 

Look at him

In the corner

No-one cares

No-one cares about the one alone

 

Their friends use them, money

An idiot, all they need

All they want, money

 

{censored} their lives

Not wanted

Not needed

No use to our world

Money

 

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FOREIGN FOOTSTEPS

 

What is the meaning the life?

When we go through all this pain and strife

Children play whilst armies are at war

There should be nothing to settle

No score

 

Your girlfriend's ditched you

The parents are near to beating too

You are in misery, what a cruel place

All you want is to be loved

 

I'm a mixed up soul, in a mixed up world

I walk into walls, but I'm alright

It's a love hate mute in my head

All I want is peace of mind

 

We are walking foreign footsteps

Across deep blue waters

We are all walking to the end

 

We are living for someone else

Someone we don't know, can't see

Can't see the point of life

Jump, leap take your soul

 

I'm confused but how are you?

You collide with your friends

And merge with evil

They're coming to get you

 

We are walking foreign footsteps

Across deep blue waters

We are all walking to the end

 

Walking to the end my friend

 

What is the meaning the life?

When we go through all this pain and strife

Children play whilst armies are at war

There should be nothing to settle

No score

 

We are walking foreign footsteps

Across deep blue waters

We are all walking to the end

 

Walking to the end

My friend

 

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UNDYING

 

We all come to an end one day

All fade away into the middle grey

But we will return and fight the war

The war of life

It never ends

It never begins

Relentless

 

We devestate the world evermore

It's so immense yet its defence so poor

But it will strike back in the...

War of life

It never ends

 

We take from the needy

Steal from the world

We have the power yet we run

Running in our heads

Far away

 

It will come to an end one day

May be far away but dont be haughty

They will fight back, strike back

At the heart

Struggles end

Struggles begin

Undying

 

We devestate the world evermore

It's so immense yet its defence so poor

But it will strike back in the...

War of life

It never ends

 

We take from the needy

Steal from the world

We have the power yet we run

Running in our heads

Undying

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Lots of negativity there. IMHO its tough to write a song about how the whole world sucks. Personally, I find it easier to narrow it down to one specific aspect of the world that I find particularly sucky, and write about that. When youve got , 'my girlfriends gone, my parents beat me, and are armies at war' all in the first two stanzas, well thats alot for a typical adolescent pothead to digest. Try cutting them up into smaller pieces. Each one of those topics should be enough material for an entire 'theme' album. Remember, this is just IMHO. :)

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Originally posted by Hackmonkey

Lots of negativity there. IMHO its tough to write a song about how the whole world sucks. Personally, I find it easier to narrow it down to one specific aspect of the world that I find particularly sucky, and write about that. When youve got , 'my girlfriends gone, my parents beat me, and are armies at war' all in the first two stanzas, well thats alot for a typical adolescent pothead to digest. Try cutting them up into smaller pieces. Each one of those topics should be enough material for an entire 'theme' album. Remember, this is just IMHO.
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Cool thanx for that, but this is my argument for that particualar song you commented on "Foreign Footsteps" The reason I use soo many topics in that one song is becaue it is about everyone as a whole, how different situations lareg or small can hurt just as much.

Buy thanx, o and pretty much all ym lyrics are negative, I was in a heavy rock, guitar, metal band, very negative.

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