Listen to my song PLZ

[RadiationNation]

Hey all. I just finished up this song and I figured I'd post to get some feedback. It's a sort of dancey poppy song. Please don't judge the lyrics (or "songwriting" aspect) of the song too harshly, as they're most just there so I can have something to sing. It's supposed to be a fun song .

 

Anyway, you can listen to it here:

 

http://www.myspace.com/incredibledancing

 

Comments and criticisms would be much appreciated.

 

Thanks.

[Chicken Monkey]

I like it--it's weird. I like the two different sections, though neither one especially stands out as a chorus. You might want to bridge the together a little bit; they sound kind of like two completely different songs. Give them something in common to carry through.

 

I'd also think about putting in a C section, as it gets a bit predictable going back and forth between the two.

 

Finally, I'd ease up on the distortion on the vocals. I realize that the vocals are not the focal point, but the heavy distortion actually drew my attention to the vocal, because I was trying to figure out what you were saying. I like that it is distorted, I'd just dial it down a bit.

 

A lot of cool sounds, clear sense of humor, I liked it!

[Chicken Monkey]

Oh, Yeah, a lot of posters here read from work, and myspace is blocked for them, so you'll get a lot more feedback if you post on SoundClick or any of the other free post sites.

[chillwinston]

yeah I like it too. Reminds me of those disco punk bands. In addition to what every one else said the addition of a bass guitar might fill it out a little more.

[JSimms]

Very interesting. Not the average fare. I don't usually go for this type of music, but this has a nice listenable quality to it.

 

Keep up the good work.

 

By the way, I have a friend in NY who does electronica, you kind of remind me of him. Check it out, you might like it:

 

Mocha Lab

 

Not trying to get you to buy it, I just thought it might be something you'd like.