Members 6tring Posted February 12, 2007 Members Share Posted February 12, 2007 Verse 1I came home early from work and found her packin' our thing'sOn the table was a note and her diamond ringIt became quite clear to meThat the girl was fixin' to leaveAnd it was plain to see she wasn't waitin' for me Verse 2She said "It's over and I don't wanna fight"She was hopin' to slip away in the nightIf it's over I'm OK with thatIt won't be me who tries hold you backAnd what I have to say I can say while you pack ChorusTake the bed, take the sofa, take the chair that reclinesTake all your fav-o-rite records that used to be minePack the dishes and the stereoTV set and remote control Take it all right down to my very last dimeBut baby don't take your time Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members baron85 Posted February 12, 2007 Members Share Posted February 12, 2007 I like it. The chorus is really good. The verses need some work. One question: if you came home early and caught her leaving, how was she "hopin' to slip away in the night"? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members 6tring Posted February 12, 2007 Author Members Share Posted February 12, 2007 I like it. The chorus is really good. The verses need some work. One question: if you came home early and caught her leaving, how was she "hopin' to slip away in the night"? He came home early from work and found her packing. She left a note and her diamond ring on the table implying that she didn't want to face him. If he had not surprised her by coming home early she would have been gone when he got home. That is at least the picture I am trying to paint. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members SaltyDogg Posted February 12, 2007 Members Share Posted February 12, 2007 One thing I am gradually realizing is that it's really up to you if you like the song... Of course you can get advice and suggestions - which I'm sure you're after- but my own problem is a lack of confidence... as in, I like it, but should I like it. Don't fall down that trap:cry: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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