Members pluginbabies Posted March 23, 2007 Members Share Posted March 23, 2007 First post...woohoo! I'd love a bit of feedback on this song I just recorded! I'm no lyricist (can you tell!?!?), but any thoughts would be great. Also, I just can't seem to get my recording to sound how i want them too (not rubbish) so any tips on that would be fantastic too! http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=653481 Cheers! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Chicken Monkey Posted March 24, 2007 Members Share Posted March 24, 2007 It sounds a bit like Gavin Rossdale snorting Ritalin. The lyrics just sound like they need a cruel edit. Cut it to pieces, put it back together, repeat. The words have a great "mouth feel"; I think that you were on to that given the title. Lyrics that sound good are a major element that a lot of people miss when they are writing--it's the difference between "princess on the steeple and all the pretty people they're all drinkin' thinkin' they've got it made" and something that actually makes some {censored}ing sense. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Comic_God Posted March 25, 2007 Members Share Posted March 25, 2007 Song is great, nice pop feel to it. Only feedback is on the vocal. It's not quite on key in every part. Just a little pitchy here and there is all. Not a huge deal though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members eeglug Posted March 26, 2007 Members Share Posted March 26, 2007 Energetic and catchy. The lyrics are ok. The title is great and perhaps raises expectations that aren't paid off in the actual song. But that doesn't make it bad. The drums could be a little better mixed in...maybe a bit of high end is lacking(?). Otherwise I thought it was all good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members pluginbabies Posted March 27, 2007 Author Members Share Posted March 27, 2007 Thanks for the feedback, its nice to know i'm not writing complete tripe, and your encouragement has really made me want to write some more! I really hate writing lyrics, i'm not the most poetic of people so it doesn't come very easily! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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