Members Vlad_M Posted January 9, 2012 Members Share Posted January 9, 2012 This is a very simple song, it just cycles through E-A7-B7 for every line and there are no choruses or any fancy things. Rambled outta town, down the road I am bound, I see no direction homeYou said to me, I cannot belive, you're-a goin down that way all aloneThe roosters they sing as the dawn greets me, my feet pound in time with the dustI'll ramble in stride I got nothin to hide, in my clothes of dead ancient rust Don't say please, and don't you beg me, I've long since made up my mindI'll fold up my will, like an old dollar bill, if on this road I happen to dieIf by chance I'm deceased, leave the can of old grease, and the silver coin to my sonBut if I survive, I'll be well and alive, and I'll owe not a thing to no one My future unwinds, my past far behind, fate paves my long winding trailLike an eagle who glides, rusty chains I survived, unbinding them I did not failAnd the sparrows fly, they dart by then they hide, much like your wavering loveDon't want apologies, get on up off your knees, your judgement shall come from above The mountains will moan as past them I roam, looking for some peace of mindI struggle to see what you want out of me, and the life that I'm leaving behindIt once was a dream, now a broken down scheme, the evening we shared our vowsI did all I could, but I failed to find good, in sorrow now i must drown I'll ramble all around, become one with the ground, and the sky that is now my roofI'm no good at goodbyes, wipe the tears from your eyes, I owe you no burden of proofI broke rusty chains that have caused me great pain, but time waits for no one you seeso long and farewell, I still wish you well, but its now time to just let me be Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rhino55 Posted January 11, 2012 Members Share Posted January 11, 2012 There is some great stuff in here, but the opening line could be stronger. If my assumption is correct and this has a folky upbeat delivery, you can probably get away with it. Rambling, down the road, and no direction home all work in the genre. It is sort of like saying you got the blues in a blues song. Expected. Might be good, might be bad. Up to you to sell it. Only other thing that jumps out to me is it seems "But if I survive" should be 'As long as I survive.' Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members jharley Posted January 12, 2012 Members Share Posted January 12, 2012 Love it, the only piece I don't get is "my feet pound in time with the dust." I am having a hard time picturing that in my head, b/c I don't know how dust pounds nor keeps time. What about "my feet pound out time in the dust" or "my feet keep time in the dust" or if you need an extra syllable "my footsteps keep time in the dust." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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