Members rickidoo Posted April 11, 2012 Members Share Posted April 11, 2012 Thank you, I'm all set on this one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted April 11, 2012 Members Share Posted April 11, 2012 It's good. I like it. I wonder about dolphins dancing and running. Dancing I could kind of see. "Dolphins leap and zoom ahead to clear the way," maybe? LCK Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members bee3 Posted April 11, 2012 Members Share Posted April 11, 2012 Dolphins pierce the blue surface and lead the way Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rickidoo Posted April 11, 2012 Author Members Share Posted April 11, 2012 Thank you LCK and Bee... I got rid of "ran" and replaced with Zoom. I forgot dolphins don't have legs. Rick Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members bee3 Posted April 11, 2012 Members Share Posted April 11, 2012 I'm not crazy about zoom.... maybe forge? I think zoom makes it sound too much like a children's song. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members stickboymusic Posted April 11, 2012 Members Share Posted April 11, 2012 I forgot dolphins don't have legs.Rick We have all made this mistake. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members stickboymusic Posted April 11, 2012 Members Share Posted April 11, 2012 I think zoom makes it sound too much like a children's song. This is rickidoo.... they are all childrens songs for grown ups Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members bee3 Posted April 11, 2012 Members Share Posted April 11, 2012 This is rickidoo.... they are all childrens songs for grown ups Yeah, you know... before I wrote that comment, I was thinking about Rickidoo's songs and how he's cornered that market. It's his calling card. Nevertheless, I like forge better than zoom. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted April 11, 2012 Members Share Posted April 11, 2012 I like forge better than zoom. I like zoom ahead better than forge ahead. Zoom sounds fun, and it really puts you in the dolphin's shoes. (Uh-oh, now I'm doing it.) Forging ahead sounds like work. But I like your first suggestion the best: dolphins pierce the surface. LCK Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members stickboymusic Posted April 11, 2012 Members Share Posted April 11, 2012 How about Dolphins zoom, they dance ahead, then clear the way Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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