Members espec10001 Posted May 14, 2012 Members Share Posted May 14, 2012 I think the fingerpicking, the lyrics, and the video is all very good and well done. The only thing I think you could work on if it is this spoken word format is project more strength in your voice. It sounds like you aren't sure of what you are saying, and that kills a lot of the power of the message you are trying to convey, at least to my ears. When I hear someone speak, I want to hear conviction and power behind what they are saying. I've heard some off-the-wall makes no sense poetry read out in public but the *delivery* makes it strong and forceful and like-wise memorable. The voice you're using in the video sounds weak and too quiet, like on the verge of whispering. If you can get that down, I think you're close to a hit! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members diggthis23 Posted May 15, 2012 Members Share Posted May 15, 2012 I'm going to agree with espec10001; to work on your voice tone a bit. It may be the compression you're using. The whisper does suit the song, because there's some solemnness to the words If you could figure out how to make a cleaner, crisper sound with your voice, you'll be on the right track.Nice track Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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