Members ebowist Posted January 23, 2003 Members Share Posted January 23, 2003 hi guys! Im not new to the forum, but i don't post very often.Well I have written quite a few songs, but most of them suck, but this is one of my favorites(but it sucks too). It doesnt have the traditional song pattern, it is a rather "progressive" piece of work, with lots of tempo and chord changes. wish i could post the music. dark circles you call eyesi'll lose myselfand diein this place where the rain fallsit always falls on meperfectlyyou were never mine to beshining on high reflectingin firei sleepthrew this awayonto your youthinto pure hatrednow into youso faithfulso bluewonder nowwanderingthis blame it falls on meI am the cause of your sufferingI am the feelings in the seawhy won't you leave this where it longs to bein the depths of your hearts purityno one ever understandsno one ever really caresonly God knows who i amonly He knows what i am Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members guilded Posted January 23, 2003 Members Share Posted January 23, 2003 It looks a lot more like poetry than lyrics to me. And although I dont really read poetry, this caught my eye. Usually I'll read something over, and either I don't like it and don't post, or I read it over a few times because of something. If it actually fits into the song, then that's even better. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ebowist Posted January 23, 2003 Author Members Share Posted January 23, 2003 thanks, yeah i guess it does sound kinda like poetry, but its fits the song well. I almost always write the music around the lyrics, not the lyrics around the music. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members AlwayzMisBhavin Posted January 23, 2003 Members Share Posted January 23, 2003 I like it.. but it's the way you have it formatted which makes it look more like poetry.. If you seperate the lines into verses and not use one word lines.. instead the whole thought on one line.. it will help us see how it may work with music.. Good Luck Alwayz MiBhavin Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ebowist Posted January 25, 2003 Author Members Share Posted January 25, 2003 dark circles you call eyesi'll lose myself and diein this place where the rain fallsit always falls on meperfectlyyou were never mine to beshining on high reflectingin fire i sleepthrew this away onto your youthinto pure hatred now into youso faithful so bluewonder now wanderingthis blame it falls on meI am the cause of your sufferingI am the feelings in the seawhy won't you leave this where it longs to bein the depths of your hearts purityno one ever understandsno one ever really caresonly God knows who i amonly He knows what i am there, thats the way i sing it, more or less. Hey AlwayzMisBhavin, what part of maryland do you live in? I live in Virginia, near D.C. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members angeloflost Posted January 26, 2003 Members Share Posted January 26, 2003 I really like the lyrics. What type of genre (or anti-genre) are they for? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members sydfan Posted January 27, 2003 Members Share Posted January 27, 2003 I'm getting a real strong sense that this tune is about Jesus. It's beautiful. I love songs about the Lord that are slightly veiled....I really like it!! If it's not about Jesus, my apologies to you!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ebowist Posted January 27, 2003 Author Members Share Posted January 27, 2003 well, haha, thats kinda a hard question to answer. I suppose its rock. I guess a new incarnation of alt. rock, yet its not alt rock, I would call it gothic, yet I hate connotation that goes with that. Perhaps poetic-rock would be a good name to call it. I dunno i dont really think about what to my style, its such a conglomeration of different things its hard pin down exactlty. Im sure that did not help at all. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members ebowist Posted January 27, 2003 Author Members Share Posted January 27, 2003 well sydfan, you may be right. You see, when I write my songs, they are spur of the moment inspiration, I dont think about what I am writing I just write. Then afterwards I adjust things that dont fit etc. So at the time, I normally don't know what I am writing about, I just write the words. So I like to think about what I wrote, and the different possibilities of meanings. You bring up a good point, and I think im inclined to agree with you. Confused? (i know im wierd, and yes I am a christian) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members angeloflost Posted January 27, 2003 Members Share Posted January 27, 2003 Originally posted by ebowist Im sure that did not help at all. I understand. I love your signature by the way. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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