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  • Morning, Morning Stick Challenge - Lyrics

    These are the lyrics for the April Stick Challenge. It's a sort of nursery rhyme.

    Any thoughts on them?

    Thanks!

    Three. (revised, including a title change)
    (c)2012 Rick Dieffenbach


    Morning, morning
    a new day, dawning
    as daddy bakes
    and mommy wakes

    baby plays
    toys on his tray
    he laughs out loud
    a happy child

    There was a time when all they knew was just me and me

    A morning stroll
    is never old
    With baby there
    and mommy's care

    There was a time when all they knew was just me and me
    And then there were three...
    three...
    a family
    "Now and then... occasionally... it seems to have.... too many notes"

  • #2
    Maybe you could say

    as daddy bakes
    and mommy wakes

    bring it up to date

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    • #3
      STICK - DONE! THANKS. That is wicked good.

      Rick
      "Now and then... occasionally... it seems to have.... too many notes"

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      • #4
        What does "without a warning" mean in this context?

        I'm not a fan of "baby talk" and "to get the babe". There have to be more colorful ways to put it.

        Personally, I'm not feeling verses. I really like the chorus idea, and bet it would sound cool, but the verses feel more like filler to me. I also think you should get "and then there were three" into the first chorus as that is the hook of the song, as far as I can tell.
        Don't listen to Justin.
        LCK - 2/21/2012

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