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  • Shattered Glass

    Any suggestions or comments welcome, as usual.



    http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=12088507



    Shattered glass

    Broken this time

    Nothing but shattered glass



    You made me quiver with your kiss

    Then you made me invisible with a flick of your wrist

    Kisses blown to solid walls

    Just how far did you let me fall



    Ohh, you told me we would always last

    Ohh, your words have no meaning, they just shatter glass



    When I fell in the way of harm

    Did you wish for me to sleep forever, not return to your arms

    You told me to remember

    But it
    All things must pass...

  • #2
    Very nice, very listenable. The perfect Grace song.
    “I started being a songwriter pretending I could do it, and it turned out I could.” —James Taylor.

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    • #3
      Lovely to listen to Grace (as always).



      I'm just a bit confused reading the lyric however. These are the parts referring to shattered glass :



      Shattered glass

      Broken this time

      Nothing but shattered glass



      Ohh, your words have no meaning, they just shatter glass



      Ohh, but in my mind, there
      'Music is your own experience, your thoughts, your wisdom. If you don't live it, it won't come out of your horn'.
      CHARLIE PARKER

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      • #4
        Hmm, yes, I did notice that actually, but I didn't think it was a problem.
        All things must pass...

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        • #5






          Quote Originally Posted by grace_slick
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          Hmm, yes, I did notice that actually, but I didn't think it was a problem.




          OK - you've noticed it - that's the main thing.
          'Music is your own experience, your thoughts, your wisdom. If you don't live it, it won't come out of your horn'.
          CHARLIE PARKER

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          • #6
            Pretty damn good, great vocal. Sounds very personal, a problem I have in my songwriting, getting that introspective, I'm more an observer in my writing.
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            • #7
              Lover the chorus "Open my heart" stuff. That's spectacular.



              The "Ooh, you told me" parts left me a little musically off. I think I wanted to hear the second chord in the progression as a major, not a minor. That sort of threw me off every time it passed by.
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              • #8
                Also you tenses are putting me off. "Just how far will you let me fall" will give it some urgency. As listeners, we want to be in the middle off the emotions; not after the fact.
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                • #9
                  Thanks guys!



                  Marshal, the tenses thing I actually changed to and from a few times, with the
                  All things must pass...

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                  • leftyaxeman
                    leftyaxeman commented
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                    Grace Slick--- "Lefty, thanks for the comment! Yeah, when I first started writing songs NONE of them were even remotely personal. I found it embarrassing and too exposing to do that sort of thing, and didn


                • #10






                  Quote Originally Posted by grace_slick
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                  And thanks LCK, if I neglected to say earlier!




                  You did, but I didn't mind.
                  “I started being a songwriter pretending I could do it, and it turned out I could.” —James Taylor.

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                  • #11

                    A couple of things lyrically 

                     If the words had no meaning they wouldn't be able to shatter glass.  The meaning might be empty and that very well could be why they shatter your glass.

                    I also couldn't help but think of some art I've seen made out of broken glass.  Beautiful stuff.  

                    I really like the way you turned the metaphor with the last line.

                    ...

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                    • grace_slick
                      grace_slick commented
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                      Thank you!

                      This song seems really old to me now, even though I only did it a few weeks ago.

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