Members cool_E Posted July 9, 2002 Members Share Posted July 9, 2002 Pat explains in this chapter that verses shouldbuild upon one another to build power. He providesan example of a lyric entitled "Chain Reaction."This lyric is about violence. Each verse describesviolence in a different setting/scene. They areall good verses and they are tied together bythe chorus. However, Pat asserts that this lyricdoes not have the power it could have if theverses all worked together, building as theygo. Pat says the test for verse continuity isto string the verses together without thechorus. They should flow, working togetherand building. If they don't the lyric, asa whole, does not achieve the kind of power it could have achieved. Pat closes the chapter saying that verse developmentis the trickiest part of writing a lyric. If the verses are too close to each otherthe repetition of the chorus will becomestatic & boring. If the verses are too farapart the lyric will lack power. ==========================Exercise Here's one verse and the chorus for Pat's'Chain Reaction' lyric. Complete the pieceby writing two additional verses. Make a story, maintain continuity. verse Camille slips along the wallMuslims at their postsPulls the pin and lobs the metalPerfect hook shot, crowd explodesSpilling colors red and khakiGargles in their throatsInfidels and pagan hosts chorusOne more link in a chain reactionSpinning round and round and roundA tiny step, a small subtractionOne more link in a chain reaction Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Reposki Posted July 9, 2002 Members Share Posted July 9, 2002 Hey, just poking in to say these posts of yours are appreciated... I think I'll hafta drop by the store later and grab me that book. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members cool_E Posted July 10, 2002 Author Members Share Posted July 10, 2002 thanks. I'm learning a lot for sure. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members cool_E Posted July 12, 2002 Author Members Share Posted July 12, 2002 No takers, huh? Oh well, here's my shot...---------------------------------- verse Camille slips along the wallMuslims at their postsPulls the pin and lobs the metalPerfect hook shot, crowd explodesSpilling colors red and khakiGargles in their throatsInfidels and pagan hosts chorusOne more link in a chain reactionSpinning round and round and roundA tiny step, a small subtractionOne more link in a chain reaction verseAnother day in full jihadBloody as the nextCamille, a warrior to the endBoldly, proudly, leaves the tentClad in tightly fit explosivesThumb holding backCamille's last, proud attack verseBuy a ticket, board the busWait until it's crowdedCamille is watching, gently nervousWill the bomb be spotted?A cry of fear, and then confusionBlinding, burining lightGiving all to win the fight Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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