Members edtrussell Posted July 17, 2003 Members Share Posted July 17, 2003 Here are a couple of songs i have wroght, i would love some of your thoughts. thanks ====================================If you ever wonder where you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members edtrussell Posted July 17, 2003 Author Members Share Posted July 17, 2003 Here are a couple of songs i have wroght, i would love some of your thoughts He He He, should be wrote not wroght Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members loveyourstarfish Posted July 18, 2003 Members Share Posted July 18, 2003 Good, I thought some of the time you could have changed some words around ie the rhyme of recession and depression is a bit lame but if you like it, who cares. Otherwise, the lyrics were pretty good. Keep it up man. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members jj113054 Posted July 19, 2003 Members Share Posted July 19, 2003 good imagery. I think a little goes a kong way. for those times when the cperfect rhyme seems tough, tryhttp://www.rhymezone.com/ Keep up the good work!! JJ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members jj113054 Posted July 19, 2003 Members Share Posted July 19, 2003 Sorry about that spelling (typing) I really am not illiterate!! JJ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Greenshoe Posted July 21, 2003 Members Share Posted July 21, 2003 My only comment is on the first song and the word 'perspective'. If you can find another synonym that would be better - the word 'perspective' especially when sung back to back is a bit of a mouthful and awkward. Depending on the tempo of the song, the singer could easily get out of rhythm quickly or if it is sung in the pocket the words will sound jumbled. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members edtrussell Posted July 22, 2003 Author Members Share Posted July 22, 2003 Thanks for the replies, i realy appritiate it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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